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When looking for information for a research project, some students prefer to get their information from the internet. others prefer to mainly use printed materials such as books and academic journals. Which do you prefer and why v.1

When looking for information for a research project, some students prefer to get their information from the internet. others prefer to mainly use printed materials such as books and academic journals. Which do you prefer and why v. 1
In recent times, many countries encourage the students in the final year of their high school training do some work or travel for a period of one year. This essay shall discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this practice. There are two main advantages of making students' work or travel for a year before starting university. Firstly, when students engage in some type of work, they are usually paid some money. These funds could be saved up for pocket money in the university. Also earning also helps them to be responsible with money at an early age. In addition, travelling to visit foreign countries helps them in terms of exposure. For example, students visiting an Asian country will help them probably learn a new language and the eastern culture. However, there are also some disadvantages of students travelling or working for a year. One of the negatives is that when students get accustomed to earning money, they might be discouraged to further their studies. Furthermore, travelling to another country might be dangerous for them. This is mainly because the majority students are still young and immature, therefore, they might be exposed to several vices unsupervised. For instance, a lot of high school undergraduates are still under their parents where some wrong habits can be corrected. However, travelling to a different place will give them freedom to probably engage in bad behaviour. In conclusion, in some nations, travelling or working for one year is advised, especially for high school students in their final year. Some of the benefits of this practice include; the opportunity to earn some money and get exposed to other people's way of life. While the negatives are the dangers of learning bad habits and possible discouragement form university studies after this period.
In recent times,
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countries
encourage the
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students
in the final
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year
of their high school training do
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work or travel for a period of one
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year
. This essay shall discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this practice.

There are two main advantages of making students' work or travel for a
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year
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before
starting university.
Firstly
, when
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students
engage in
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some
type of work, they are
usually
paid
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some
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money
. These funds could
be saved
up for pocket
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money
in the university.
Also
earning
also
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helps
them to be responsible with
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money
at an early age.
In addition
,
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travelling
to visit foreign
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countries
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helps
them in terms of exposure.
For example
,
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students
visiting an Asian
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country
will
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help
them
probably
learn a new language and the eastern culture.

However
, there are
also
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some
disadvantages of
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students
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travelling
or working for a
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year
. One of the negatives is that when
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students
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get
accustomed to earning
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money
, they might
be discouraged
to
further
their studies.
Furthermore
,
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travelling
to another
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country
might be
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dangerous
for them. This is
mainly
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because
the majority
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students
are
still
young and immature,
therefore
, they might
be exposed
to several vices unsupervised.
For instance
,
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a lot of
high school undergraduates are
still
under their parents where
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some
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wrong
habits can
be corrected
.
However
,
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travelling
to a
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different
place will give them freedom to
probably
engage in
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bad
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behaviour
.

In conclusion
, in
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some
nations,
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travelling
or working for one
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year
is advised
,
especially
for high school
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students
in their final
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year
.
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Some of the
benefits of this practice include; the opportunity to earn
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some
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money
and
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get
exposed to other
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people
's way of life. While the negatives are the
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dangers
of learning
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bad
habits and possible discouragement form university studies after this period.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay When looking for information for a research project, some students prefer to get their information from the internet. others prefer to mainly use printed materials such as books and academic journals. Which do you prefer and why v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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