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When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
With the advent of technology, everything has been changed in almost every field. Although one school of thought anticipates that electronic books will vanish the traditional ones, while others ponder that paper books will never be replaced. In this essay, I am going to discuss both the sides of the statement along with my opinion in the following paragraphs. Firstly, today, everyone uses gadgets like smart phones, laptops, tablets, and so on which makes learning easy. E-books are cost-effective as it can be assessed through digital library over the mobile phones free of cost because it requires Internet in the device. For example, it is a perfect way to acquire knowledge by using electronic medium so that no more trees will be cut to print the books as deforestation is at its peak level. So, e-books are pocket-friendly as well as eco-friendly. On the contrary, one cannot ignore the fact that printed books have been established in ancient times in which the ancestors of us have written many things which cannot be put in the form of digital way. Furthermore, paper books are helpful in better understanding of the concepts and better concentration can be put. They are great in getting the information about anything which is available in the library. Hence, Printed books could not be disappearing. In my opinion, I do believe that paper books are not assessed by everyone as they are just bound between the libraries; however, e-books are being used by every individual. Traditional books will be used less, but could not be vanish or replaced by any other source. To conclude, electronic books have brought the death of paper-based one, but they both have their place irrespective of other things. Printed books should not be disappearing whether the e-books will get popularity in the future.
With the advent of technology, everything has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
in almost every field. Although one school of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
anticipates that electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
will vanish the traditional ones, while others ponder that paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
will never
be replaced
. In this essay, I am going to discuss both the sides of the statement along with my opinion in the following paragraphs.

Firstly
,
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today
, everyone
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uses
gadgets like smart phones, laptops, tablets, and
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so
on which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
learning easy. E-books
are cost
-effective as it can
be assessed
through digital library over the mobile phones free of cost
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it requires Internet in the device.
For example
, it is a perfect way to acquire knowledge by using electronic medium
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that no more trees will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
to print the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
as deforestation is at its peak level.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, e-books are pocket-friendly
as well
as eco-friendly.

On the contrary
, one cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
the fact that printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
have
been established
in ancient times in which the ancestors of us have written
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many
things which cannot
be put
in the form of digital way.
Furthermore
, paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are helpful in better understanding of the concepts and better concentration can
be put
. They are great in getting the information about anything which is available in the library.
Hence
, Printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
could not be disappearing.

In my opinion, I do believe that paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are not assessed by everyone as they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
bound between the libraries;
however
, e-books are being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by every individual. Traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
will be
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used
less,
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but
could not be
Consider using a past participle here: "vanished".
vanish
or replaced by any other source.

To conclude
, electronic
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books
have brought the death of paper-based one,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they both have their place irrespective of other things. Printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
should not be disappearing whether the e-books will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
popularity in the future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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