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When families have a meal together it is considered social activity. Do you think eatingtogether is important to people in your country? v.2

When families have a meal together it is considered social activity. Do you think eatingtogether is important to people in your country? v. 2
It is irrefutable that eating together is a social activity. Sharing dinner together gives everyone a sense of identity. It can help ease day-to-day conflicts, as well as establish traditions and memories that can last a lifetime. The first and foremost advantage of eating together is that it creates a sense of belonging. Conversations during the meal provide opportunities for the family to bond and learn from one another. It’s a chance to share information and news of the day, as well as give extra attention to your children and teens. Family meals foster warmth, security and love, as well as feelings of belonging. It can be a unifying experience for all. Secondly, family mealtime is the perfect opportunity to teach appropriate table manners, etiquette, and social skills. Parents can be perfect role models in this and children learn by following them. What is more, meals prepared and eaten at home are usually more nutritious and healthy. They contain more fruits, vegetables, and dairy products along with additional nutrients such as fiber, calcium, vitamins A and C, and folate. Furthermore, research shows that frequent family dinners (five or more a week), are associated with lower rates of smoking, drinking, and illegal drug use in pre-teens and teenagers when compared to families that eat together two or fewer times per week. To add to it, children do better in school when they eat more meals with their parents and family. In my country most people do value shared mealtime. However, the fast paced life and influence of the global culture is taking some away from this custom. Fortunately, some recent studies have shown that even in the developed countries people are realizing the importance of family meals and are downshifting. It is indeed time to bring the " family" back to the dinner table. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that eating together is definitely an important social activity. That it why it has been said that, ‘The family that eats together stays together’.
It is irrefutable that eating together is a social activity. Sharing dinner together
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gives


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everyone
a sense of identity. It can
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help
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ease
day-to-day conflicts,
as well
as
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establish


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traditions
and memories that can last a lifetime.

The
first
and foremost advantage of eating together is that it creates a sense of belonging.

Conversations during the
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meal
provide opportunities for the
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family
to bond and learn from

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one
another. It’s a chance to share information and news of the day,
as well
as give
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extra


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attention
to your children and teens.
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Family
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meals
foster warmth, security and
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love
, as
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well


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as
feelings of belonging. It can be a unifying experience for all.

Secondly
,
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family
mealtime is the perfect opportunity to teach appropriate table manners,

etiquette, and social
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skills
. Parents can be perfect role models in this and children learn
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by


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following
them.
What is more
,
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meals
prepared and eaten at home are
usually
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more


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nutritious
and healthy. They contain more fruits, vegetables, and dairy products along
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with


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additional
nutrients such as fiber, calcium, vitamins A and C, and folate.

Furthermore
, research
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shows
that frequent
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family
dinners (five or more a week),
are associated
with lower rates of smoking, drinking, and illegal drug
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use
in
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pre-teens
and

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teenagers
when compared to
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families
that eat together two or fewer times per week. To

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add
to it, children do better in school when they eat more
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meals
with their parents and

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family
.

In my country most
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people
do value shared mealtime.
However
, the
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fast
paced life and

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influence
of the global culture is taking
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some
away from this custom.
Fortunately
,
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some


recent studies have shown that even in the
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developed countries
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people
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are realizing
the

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importance
of
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family
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meals
and are downshifting. It is
indeed
time to bring the
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&quot
;
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family&quot
;
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back


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to
the dinner table.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that eating together is definitely an
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important


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social
activity. That it why it has
been said
that, ‘The
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family
that eats together
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stays


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together
’.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Mistakes

IELTS essay When families have a meal together it is considered social activity. Do you think eatingtogether is important to people in your country? v. 2

Essay
  American English
26 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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