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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement grades encourage students to learn Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.2

grades encourage students to learn Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 2
Grades are considered the most reliable measurement of a student’s ability to study well at school. Some people have the thought that grades encourage students to learn. On the other hands, grades are regarded to have an opposite effect on students. I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, getting high grades causes huge pressure for many students. Nowadays, many schools make the students undergo too many tests. This is because most parents see tests as the correct result of their children’s performance at school. However, a substantial number of exams dramatically pressurizes students. There isn’t just enough time for them to study and absorb all of the knowledge that they had learned. Some students, fortunately, cope well with pressure, that being said, many of them fall apart and feel extremely despondent because of the overwhelming pressure. My own experience is a good example to illustrate this. The freshman year of high school was really tough for me. I had to get used to taking numerous test. During some weeks, there were three tests of different subjects that I had to take every day. I had no choice but to spend a few all-nighters, which exhausted me and caused me not to concentrate in class in the next day, to prepare well for all the exams since I would get into trouble if I had bad grades. It took me a considerable of amount of time to familiarize myself with the extensive amount of tests. Furthermore, students may develop the bad habit of cheating to get good grades. Lots of parents take good grades for granted and feel that it is their children’s responsibility to pass exams with flying colors. Instead of motivating their children when they have bad grades, parents often harshly criticize them and sometimes severely punish them because they feel ashamed in front of other parents whose children have higher grades. As a result, the children, in their desperate times, use inappropriate measures, such as cheating in exams or just memorizing the concept without fully understand it. Consequently, they will only have the moderate knowledge of the lessons and in addition, they won’t have the basics of subjects. For example, in my country, Vietnam, parents are strict about their children maintaining the good grades. Many students become very afraid when they have bad grades so they start to learn to cheat in the exams although they know that they will be severely punished if they get caught. Moreover, students begin to forget about the real meaning of learning is knowledge, not grades. In conclusion, I strongly believe that grades are not a perfect encouragement for students to study. I hold this opinion because grades cause pressure for students and students will learn to cheat and other bad habits to get good grades. Students ought to regard knowledge, instead of high grades, as their goal to learn.
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Grades
are considered
the most reliable measurement of a
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student’s
ability to study well at
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school
.
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Some
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people
have the
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thought
that
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grades
encourage
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students
to
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learn
. On the other hands,
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grades
are regarded
to have an opposite effect on
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students
. I am of the latter opinion. I
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feel
this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To
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begin
with, getting high
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grades
causes huge
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pressure
for
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many
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students
. Nowadays,
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many
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schools
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make
the
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students
undergo too
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many
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tests
. This is
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because
most
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parents
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see
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tests
as the correct result of their
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children’s
performance at
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school
.
However
, a substantial number of exams
dramatically
pressurizes
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students
. There isn’t
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just
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enough
time for them to study and absorb
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all of the
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knowledge
that they had learned.
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Some
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students
,
fortunately
, cope well with
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pressure
, that
being said
,
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many
of them fall apart and
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feel
extremely
despondent
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because
of the overwhelming
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pressure
. My
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own
experience is a
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good
example to illustrate this. The freshman year of high
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school
was
really
tough for me. I had to
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get
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used
to taking numerous
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test
. During
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some
weeks, there were three
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tests
of
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different
subjects that I had to take every day. I had no choice
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but
to spend a few all-nighters, which exhausted me and caused me not to concentrate in
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class
in the
next
day, to prepare well for all the exams since I would
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get
into trouble if I had
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bad
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grades
. It took me
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a considerable of
amount of time to familiarize myself with the extensive amount of
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tests
.

Furthermore
,
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students
may develop the
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bad
habit of cheating to
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get
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good
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grades
. Lots of
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parents
take
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good
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grades
for granted and
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feel
that it is their
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children’s
responsibility to pass exams with flying colors.
Instead
of motivating their
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children
when they have
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bad
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grades
,
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parents
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often
harshly
criticize them and
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sometimes
severely
punish them
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because
they
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feel
ashamed in front of other
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parents
whose
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children
have higher
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grades
.
As a result
, the
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children
, in their desperate times,
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use
inappropriate measures, such as cheating in exams or
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just
memorizing the concept without
fully
understand it.
Consequently
, they will
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only
have the moderate
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knowledge
of the lessons and
in addition
, they won’t have the basics of subjects.
For example
, in my country, Vietnam,
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parents
are strict about their
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children
maintaining the
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good
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grades
.
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Many
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students
become
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very
afraid when they have
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bad
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grades
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so
they
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start
to
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learn
to cheat in the exams although they know that they will be
severely
punished if they
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get
caught.
Moreover
,
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students
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begin
to forget about the real meaning of learning is
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knowledge
, not grades.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that
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grades
are not a perfect encouragement for
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students
to study. I hold this opinion
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because
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grades
cause
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pressure
for
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students
and
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students
will
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learn
to cheat and other
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bad
habits to
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get
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good
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grades
.
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Students
ought to regard
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knowledge
,
instead
of high
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grades
, as their goal to
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learn
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
74Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay grades encourage students to learn Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
495 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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