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When doing group projects, some people are allowed to choose anyone they wish for; others are allowed to choose those who think differently from them. Which do you think is more effective? v.1

When doing group projects, some people are allowed to choose anyone they wish for; others are allowed to choose those who think differently from them. Which do you think is more effective? v. 1
It is irrefutable that travelling brings out an unseen side of the person. While there are many benefits to student exchange program, there are also some drawbacks to consider. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument. The most significant advantage of the program is advanced studies. Most the student travel to a country with advanced research in the field of study they are enrolled. For example, a mechanical engineer from the USA ofter visit Germany as an exchange student. It is because Germany has an edge in automobile technology. As a result, the knowledge acquired by students during their stay, which might help them in innovating in their respective countries or fetching an internship in the future. On the other hand, most of the parents are scared to send their kids in a foreign country. The biggest concern for them is the safety of their child. For instance, a student with no connection in a foreign land will feel unsafe and would be hesitant to trust anyone. As a solution, Schools do work with families by assigning a kid to them as their foster parents during their stay. Evidently, this program has helped many of the students, Along with students, families come together and learn about their cultures as well. In conclusion, despite few safety concerns of parents, regarding their kids travelling to an unknown country. In my opinion, student exchange programs are great initiatives. They not only mould the student, it makes them indipendent as well.
It is irrefutable that travelling brings out an unseen side of the person. While there are
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many
benefits to
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student
exchange
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program
, there are
also
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some
drawbacks to consider. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument.

The most significant advantage of the
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program
is advanced
studies. Most the
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student
travel to a
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country
with advanced research in the field of study they
are enrolled
.
For example
, a mechanical engineer from the USA
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ofter
visit Germany as an exchange
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student
. It is
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because
Germany has an edge in automobile technology.
As a result
, the knowledge acquired by
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students
during their stay, which might
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help
them
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in innovating in
their respective
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countries
or fetching an internship in the future.

On the other hand
, most of the parents
are scared
to
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send
their kids in a foreign
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country
. The biggest concern for them is the safety of their child.
For instance
, a
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student
with no connection in a foreign land will feel unsafe and would be hesitant to trust anyone. As a solution, Schools do work with families by assigning a kid to them as their foster parents during their stay.
Evidently
, this
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program
has
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helped
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many
of the
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students
, Along with
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students
, families
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come
together and learn about their cultures
as well
.

In conclusion
, despite few safety concerns of parents, regarding their kids travelling to an unknown
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country
. In my opinion,
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student
exchange
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programs
are great initiatives. They not
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only
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mould
the
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student
, it
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makes
them
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indipendent
as well
.
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IELTS essay When doing group projects, some people are allowed to choose anyone they wish for; others are allowed to choose those who think differently from them. Which do you think is more effective? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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