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As cities become more crowded and cars increasingly fill streets and highways, many people believe that municipalities need to work harder to promote the use of public transit such as buses, trains, and subways. In many cases, though, the cost of doing th v.1

As cities become more crowded and cars increasingly fill streets and highways, many people believe that municipalities need to work harder to promote the use of public transit such as buses, trains, and subways. In many cases, though, the cost of doing th v. 1
It is believed by some that it is more vital to support developing infrastructures instead of public transportation financially. In my opinion, I do not agree with this statement as I think that funding public transportation is significantly important. One of the potential reasons why I cannot entirely agree with the above opinion is that by developing public transport systems, it will increase the people's tendency to choose a publicly available mode of transportation over their vehicles. As a result of this practice, there will be fewer vehicles on the roads and can lead to a reduction in traffic congestion. Therefore, individuals can commute to their destinations on time without any rush-hour traffic problems. Moreover, less number of vehicles on the streets promotes an environmentally friendly environment because when the exhaust fumes that are emitted by vehicles are minimized, the carbon footprint will be eventually dropped. Another point to consider is that public transportation is an affordable medium of transportation. In other words, many commuters prefer to travel by bus or train due to lower ticket prices. Therefore, it is crucial to make public transport more comfortable and reliable to facilitate many passengers. Consequently, people would be less inclined to purchase vehicles for their personal use, and this can minimize the chances of them incur debts. For example, it is widely seen that these days, the majority of individuals are trying to keep up with the Joneses by purchasing luxury vehicles, which they can hardly afford. In conclusion, I believe that it is more beneficial to subsidize in the improvements of public transportation than road infrastructure.
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is believed
by
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some
that it is more vital to support developing infrastructures
instead
of
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public
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transportation
financially
. In my opinion, I do not
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agree
with this statement as I
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think
that funding
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public
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transportation
is
significantly
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important
.

One of the potential reasons why I cannot
entirely
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agree
with the above opinion is that by developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport systems, it will increase the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's tendency to choose a
publicly
available mode of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
over their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
.
As a result
of this practice, there will be fewer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
on the roads and can lead to a reduction in traffic congestion.
Therefore
, individuals can commute to their destinations on time without any rush-hour traffic problems.
Moreover
, less number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
on the streets promotes an
environmentally
friendly environment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
when the exhaust fumes that
are emitted
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
are minimized
, the carbon footprint will be
eventually
dropped.

Another point to consider is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
is an affordable medium of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
.
In other words
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
commuters prefer to travel by bus or train due to lower ticket prices.
Therefore
, it is crucial to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport more comfortable and reliable to facilitate
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many
passengers.
Consequently
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would be less inclined to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
for their personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, and this can minimize the chances of them incur debts.
For example
, it is
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that these days, the majority of individuals are trying to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up with the
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Joneses
by purchasing luxury
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
, which they can hardly afford.

In conclusion
, I believe that it is more beneficial to subsidize in the improvements of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
than road infrastructure.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay As cities become more crowded and cars increasingly fill streets and highways, many people believe that municipalities need to work harder to promote the use of public transit such as buses, trains, and subways. In many cases, though, the cost of doing th v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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