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When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 3
It is widely believed that in design stage of a building, its function should be considered more important than its exterior. While I argue that appearance brings a lot of advantages, I totally agree with this idea. On the one hand, there is no doubt that a magnificent outer space is of significance to a building. From business perspective, appearance of a building can contribute to reputable commercial values. For example, shopping centers use their outward appearance to draw the customers’ attention, so a person who gets a positive first impression with their exterior is more likely to enter the building to ask for services. Therefore, the outlook of the constructions is always regarded as an effective advertising tool that brings considerable revenues for their owners. From cultural perspective, some buildings symbolizing the history of the city they are located in also need to be beautiful from the outside to attract tourists. Take St. Joseph’s Cathedral in Hanoi as an example, visitors not only come there because of cultural meanings but also its unique architecture. On the other hand, it is clear that the function have a fundamental role to play as every construction needs to be safe and comfortable. For instance, a shopping mall has to possess a wide walkway, a good lighting system and adequate emergency exit. Furthermore, each building has its own practical use, so architects have to design it with a view to satisfying the requirements of the building’s users. A theatre, for example, is supposed to have a well-designed sound system and a scientifically-arranged hall so that every in the audience can conveniently enjoy movies or shows. In conclusion, although both factors are important, I concur that without a proper function – based design, the gorgeous appearance of a building is only a waste of investment.
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widely
believed that in design stage of a
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building
, its function should
be considered
more
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important
than its exterior. While I argue that
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appearance
brings
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a lot of
advantages, I
totally
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agree
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idea
.

On the one hand, there is no doubt that a magnificent outer space is of significance to a
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building
. From business perspective,
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appearance
of a
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building
can contribute to reputable commercial values.
For example
, shopping centers
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use
their outward
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appearance
to draw the customers’ attention,
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so
a person who
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gets
a
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positive
first
impression with their exterior is more likely to enter the
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building
to
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ask for
services.
Therefore
, the outlook of the constructions is always regarded as an effective advertising tool that brings considerable revenues for their owners. From cultural perspective,
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some
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buildings
symbolizing the history of the city they
are located
in
also
need to be
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beautiful
from the outside to attract tourists. Take St. Joseph’s Cathedral in Hanoi as an example, visitors not
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only
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come
there
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because
of cultural meanings
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but
also
its unique architecture.

On the other hand
, it is
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clear
that the function have a fundamental role to play as every construction needs to be safe and comfortable.
For instance
, a shopping mall
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has to
possess a wide walkway, a
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good
lighting system and adequate emergency exit.
Furthermore
, each
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building
has its
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own
practical
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use
,
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so
architects
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have to
design it with a view to satisfying the requirements of the
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building’s
users. A
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theatre
,
for example
,
is supposed
to have a well-designed sound system and a
scientifically
-arranged hall
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so
that every in the audience can
conveniently
enjoy movies or
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shows
.

In conclusion
, although both factors are
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important
, I concur that without a proper function
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–
based design, the gorgeous
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appearance
of a
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building
is
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only
a waste of investment.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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