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When designing a building, some people think that the intended use of the building should be taken into account as important rather than the outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

When designing a building, some people think that the intended use of the building should be taken into account as important rather than the outward appearance. v. 1
Many people believe that when constructing a building, one should consider more upon the purpose and use of the building rather than its exterior appearance. This essay agrees that the intended use of the building should be given more priority. This essay will first discuss why a building with more careful interior plans is more successful and secondly, how the outside look is only a waste of money. Plans which consider design according to the purpose of the building are more successful and preferred when it comes to the choice of customers. That is to mean, a building architecture and structure are properly developed if the plans are focused on its targeted use. This will lead to more use of spaces available rather than losing spaces for beautiful appearance. As a result, many people willingly purchases or stays in these buildings which delivers excellent comfort and space for their living even though it is new for them. For example, let’s take a movie hall, a lot of customers complain to have comfortable seats while they hardly talk about the theatre appearance. Secondly, shifting plans too much towards the appearance of a building is only a waste of money. Even though there are many architectural designs available, many of them are too complex as well as expensive to implement. So, if the outward design is given more priority one has to spend more money for these plans which includes extra costs for the construction of design patterns, structures, and paintings which in most of the cases often takes unnecessary space and leads to poor engineering. To illustrate this, the newly developed skyscraper in Texas was a business failure and loss of money since it generated way low revenue due to its uncomfortable structures for day to day living. In conclusion, I agree that the design of a building should be planned carefully as per their needs rather than their outside appearance because comfort and satisfaction is a must for everyone.
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people
believe that when constructing a
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building
, one should consider more upon the purpose and
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use
of the
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building
rather
than its exterior
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appearance
. This essay
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agrees
that the intended
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use
of the
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building
should be
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given
more priority. This essay will
first
discuss why a
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building
with more careful interior
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plans
is more successful and
secondly
, how the outside look is
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only
a waste of money.

Plans which consider
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design
according to the purpose of the
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building
are more successful and preferred when it
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comes
to the choice of customers.
That is
to mean, a
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building
architecture and structure are
properly
developed if the
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plans
are focused
on its targeted
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use
. This will lead to more
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use
of
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spaces
available
rather
than losing
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spaces
for
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beautiful
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appearance
.
As a result
,
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many
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people
willingly
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purchases
or stays in these
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buildings
which delivers excellent comfort and
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space
for their living
even though
it is new for them.
For example
,
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let
’s take a movie hall,
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a lot of
customers complain to have comfortable seats while they hardly talk about the
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theatre
appearance.

Secondly
, shifting
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plans
too much towards the
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appearance
of a
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building
is
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only
a waste of money.
Even though
there are
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many
architectural
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designs
available,
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many
of them are too complex
as well
as expensive to implement.
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So
, if the outward
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design
is
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given
more priority one
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has to
spend more money for these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plans
which includes extra costs for the construction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
patterns, structures, and paintings which in most of the cases
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
takes unnecessary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
and leads to poor engineering. To illustrate this, the
newly
developed skyscraper in Texas was a business failure and loss of money since it generated way low revenue due to its uncomfortable structures for day to day living.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
should
be planned
carefully
as per their needs
rather
than their outside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
appearance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
comfort and satisfaction is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
for everyone.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay When designing a building, some people think that the intended use of the building should be taken into account as important rather than the outward appearance. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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