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Boxing is a blood sport which often results in physical injury. It is inappropriate for this sport to exist in the modern age. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Yo v.4

Boxing is a blood sport which often results in physical injury. It is inappropriate for this sport to exist in the modern age. Yo v. 4
It is often argued that boxing is a cruel sport that leads to the health problems in the future. It is also believed that there is no place for boxing in our society. I completely disagree with this point of view and I think that boxing is one of the sport types, which help to protect ourselves and be healthy. First of all, boxing is a sport where human may learn to defend himself. In other words, boxing is physical activity and All trainers, for instance, teach their student not no use their power against people. Boxers are allowed to use their strength only in competitions. In the case of danger for life boxers may protect themselves. Moreover, it is important not to break rules of safety during fighting and you do not get any injuries in the result. Therefore, I think that boxing is not a blood sport at all. Secondly, boxing is a sport, which makes people healthier as any other type of sport. In other words, people, who do box keep fit. For example, Olympic games' champion of 1996, 2000 and 2004 Ermakhan Ibraimov is a trainer of National boxing team. He teaches his students how to mix boxing and health. If you do exercises every day, you will reduce health issues. Therefore, boxing is a way of being healthy. To conclude, some people think that boxing is a tough sport with non-human rules. However, it is sport to defend yourself and s any kind of sport in case of following safety rules you stay healthy.
It is
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argued that boxing is a cruel
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that leads to the health problems in the future. It is
also
believed that there is no place for boxing in our society. I completely disagree with this point of view and I
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think
that boxing is one of the
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sport
types, which
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help
to protect ourselves and be healthy.

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First of all
, boxing is a
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sport
where human may learn to defend himself.
In other words
, boxing is physical activity
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and


All trainers,
for instance
, teach their student
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not no
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use
their power against
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people
. Boxers are
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allowed
to
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use
their strength
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only
in competitions. In the case of
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danger
for life boxers may protect themselves.
Moreover
, it is
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important
not to break
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rules
of safety during fighting and you do not
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get
any injuries in the result.
Therefore
, I
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think
that boxing is not a blood
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sport
at all.

Secondly
, boxing is a
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sport
, which
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makes
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people
healthier as any other type of
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sport
.
In other words
,
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people
, who do box
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keep
fit.
For example
, Olympic
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games&
#039; champion of 1996, 2000 and 2004
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Ermakhan
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Ibraimov
is a trainer of National boxing team. He teaches his students how to mix boxing and health. If you do
After the auxiliary verb 'do', use the base form of a verb. Did you mean "exercise"?
exercises
every day, you will
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reduce
health issues.
Therefore
, boxing is a way of being healthy.

To conclude
,
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some
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people
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think
that boxing is a tough
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sport
with non-human
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rules
.
However
, it is
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sport
to defend yourself and s any kind of
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sport
in case of following safety
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rules
you stay healthy.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Boxing is a blood sport which often results in physical injury. It is inappropriate for this sport to exist in the modern age. Yo v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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