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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job? v.3

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job? v. 3
It might seem strange yet blunt, but we cannot deny that we work to earn money so that we can put food on the table for us and our family. However, besides the salary we earn, we also look for job satisfaction, growth opportunity and social recognition of our race. To begin with, the stipend is important because without it we will not be working for a company at all. Some people are always after cash and would not hesitate to change their position if they are offering a higher salary. However, to others, job happiness is equally important as it ensures work-life balance and allows us to be happy in our workplace. A large number of people would not compromise their job satisfaction for the wage they are offered. Many top executives who resign from large corporations to work for smaller companies or to run their own companies are great examples of how much they value job satisfaction over the wages they earn. Moreover, the growth opportunity is another aspect people often sought for in their careers. 'A moderate salary and a great career gain aspect' is far better than 'a higher fee and no career growth' according to many professionals, and they are prudent enough to envision the future than to run after only money. Finally, people often want to be in a course that is socially appreciated and valued. For example, a few of my colleagues left high-paid private jobs to take government jobs only because that would give them social recognition and I quite understand the rationale for their decisions. In conclusion, besides earnings, job satisfaction which ensures a work-life balance is also important. Moreover, career success and social recognition often drive us to choose a career that brings us less money than we could actually make from other jobs.
It might seem strange
yet
blunt,
but
we cannot deny that we work to earn money
so
that we can put food on the table for us and our family.
However
,
besides
the salary we earn, we
also
look for
job
satisfaction
, growth opportunity and social recognition of our race.

To
begin
with, the stipend is
important
because
without
it
we will not be working for a
company
at all.
Some
people
are always after cash and would not hesitate to
change
their position if they are offering a higher salary.
However
, to others,
job
happiness is
equally
important
as it ensures work-life balance and
allows
us to be happy in our workplace.
A large number of
people
would not compromise their
job
satisfaction
for the wage they
are offered
.
Many
top executives who resign from large corporations to work for smaller
companies
or to run their
own
companies
are great examples of how much they value
job
satisfaction
over the wages they earn.

Moreover
, the growth opportunity is another aspect
people
often
sought for in their
careers
. 'A moderate salary and a great
career
gain aspect' is far better than 'a higher fee and no
career
growth' according to
many
professionals, and they are prudent
enough
to envision the future than to run after
only
money.
Finally
,
people
often
want to be in a course
that is
socially
appreciated and valued.
For example
, a few of my colleagues
left
high-paid private
jobs
to take
government
jobs
only
because
that would give them social recognition and I quite understand the rationale for their decisions.

In conclusion
,
besides
earnings,
job
satisfaction
which ensures a work-life balance is
also
important
.
Moreover
,
career
success and social recognition
often
drive us to choose a
career
that brings us less money than we could actually
make
from other
jobs
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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