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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.7

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 7
Overall, I disagree with the opinion expressed, I would like to begin by pointing out that ‘traditional skills and ways of life’ are not automatically of one country, but of a culture or community. In many ways, the history of civilisation is the history of technology: from the discovery of fire to the invention of the wheel to the development of the Internet we have been moving on from previous ways of doing things. Some technologies, such as weapons of mass destruction, are of negative impact. Others, such as medical advances, positively help people to live better or longer, and so very much help traditional ways of life. Surely, few people would seek to preserve such traditions as living in caves. Interestingly, technology can positively contribute to the keeping alive of traditional skills and ways of life. For example, the populations of some islands are too small to have normal schools. Rather than breaking up families by sending children to the mainland, education authorities have been able to use the Internet to deliver schooling online. In addition, the Internet, and modern refrigeration techniques, are being used to keep alive the traditional skills of producing salmon; it can now be ordered from, and delivered to, anywhere in the world. In conclusion, without suggesting that all technology is necessarily good, I think it is by no means ‘pointless’, in any way, to try to keep traditions alive with technology. We should not ignore technology, because it can be our friend and support our way of life.
Overall
, I disagree with the opinion expressed, I would like to
begin
by pointing out that
‘traditional
skills
and
ways
of
life’
are not
automatically
of one country,
but
of a culture

or community.

In
many
ways
, the history of
civilisation
is the history of
technology
: from the discovery of fire to the invention of the wheel to the development of the Internet we have been moving on from previous
ways
of doing things.
Some
technologies
, such as weapons of mass destruction, are of
negative
impact. Others, such as medical advances,
positively
help
people
to
live
better or longer, and
so
very
much
help
traditional
ways
of
life
.
Surely
, few
people
would seek to preserve such traditions as living in caves.

Interestingly
,
technology
can
positively
contribute to the keeping alive of
traditional
skills
and
ways
of
life
.
For example
, the populations of
some
islands are too
small
to have normal schools.
Rather
than breaking up families by sending children to the mainland, education authorities have been able to
use
the Internet to deliver schooling online.
In addition
, the Internet, and modern refrigeration techniques, are being
used
to
keep
alive the
traditional
skills
of producing salmon; it can
now
be ordered
from, and delivered to, anywhere in the world.

In conclusion
, without suggesting that all
technology
is
necessarily
good
, I
think
it is by no means ‘pointless’, in any
way
, to try to
keep
traditions alive with
technology
. We should not
ignore
technology
,
because
it can be our friend and support our
way
of
life
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
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