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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.22

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 22
Old traditional skills and ways tend to die whenever any nation makes his own technology and therefore it is useless to use those old skills all the time. I strongly disagree with this opinion that old skills shall not be omitted just because of new technological advancements. Firstly, traditional old skills and methods of life are the only way that connect your past dots to the future technology. Remembering the skills built a thousand years ago and learning the methods developed by ancestors makes you able to connect with your culture and living style of the region. For example, one particular skill of making some quilts in Sindh reminds everyone their cultural tradition and old methods how they were developed in past days? This makes sense that whatever advancements has been done, but one cannot ignore the usage of old remedies and skills. On the second, the rich old methods are the key signatures for developing the new technologies. There are a number of reasons that many technical advancements are primarily based on the old developed skills. For instance, Computer, a widely used machine, is basically based on the computational algorithms which were developed in olden days. Without using those algorithms would it have been a possible to build the advance machine? Obviously, No. Henceforth reminding the old skills helps us to get the real instinct to build new advanced technical devices as well as methods. In conclusion, It is very important that people should remember their old ways of life as they make us able to look back that what we were in past and what we are now. It also helps us to develop advanced technology without any delay.
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technology
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all the time. I
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skills
shall not
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of new technological advancements.

Firstly
, traditional
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skills
and
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methods
of life are the
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only
way that connect your past dots to the future
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technology
. Remembering the
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skills
built a thousand years ago and learning the
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methods
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developed
by ancestors
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makes
you able to connect with your culture and living style of the region.
For example
, one particular
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skill
of making
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quilts in
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Sindh
reminds everyone their cultural tradition and
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methods
how they were
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developed
in past days?
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sense that whatever advancements has
been done
,
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the usage of
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remedies and
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.

On the second, the rich
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old
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methods
are the key signatures for developing the new
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technologies
. There are a number of reasons that
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many
technical advancements are
primarily
based on the
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old
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developed
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skills
.
For instance
, Computer, a
widely
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used
machine, is
basically
based on the computational algorithms which were
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developed
in olden days. Without using those algorithms would it have been a possible to build the advance machine?
Obviously
, No.
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Henceforth
reminding the
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old
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skills
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helps
us to
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get
the real instinct to build new advanced technical devices
as well
as methods.

In conclusion
, It is
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important
that
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people
should remember their
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old
ways of life as they
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make
us able to look back that what we were in past and what we are
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now
. It
also
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helps
us to develop advanced
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technology
without any delay.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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