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what kind of reading material do you like to read most in your free time? Explain why you find this more interesting. v.1

what kind of reading material do you like to read most in your free time? Explain why you find this more interesting. v. 1
An argument, whether to imprison the guilty or utilize their talents by making them to do work has always been a hot topic and it should be put forward in logical and fact full manner. This essay will put lights on both views and provide opinion at the end. No doubt, sending the culprit to an imprisonment will do justice to the victim, the family of the victim and most importantly to the nation. The guilty should learn the lesson hard way. Until they know about the impact of heinous crime they have committed, they would not realize the intensity of it. For example, throwing them in jail in the case of rape and murder, should not suffice, but they should be given the highest degree of punishment like a death sentence. On the other hand, criminals can be utilized to do work according to the skill and talent they have. Some crimes don't have much impact and alleged guilty can be given second chance to civilize themselves. For example, cases such as purse snatching by juveniles can be considered as less impactful crime and they should be taught a lesson by making them to do the work. Another example, can be fighting of two people on the road. However, if the same crime happens in a repetitive manner by the same person then more strong action should be levied. To conclude, however, there are some crimes for which lesson can be taught by making them do the work, it should depend on the intensity if the crime to punish or not to punish. n
An argument, whether to imprison the guilty or utilize their talents by making them to do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
has always been a hot topic and it should
be put
forward in logical and fact full manner. This essay will put lights on both views and provide opinion at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
.

No doubt, sending the culprit to an imprisonment will do justice to the victim, the family of the victim and most
importantly
to the nation. The guilty should learn the lesson
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
way. Until they know about the impact of heinous
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crime
they have committed, they would not realize the intensity of it.
For example
, throwing them in jail in the case of rape and murder, should not suffice,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the highest degree of punishment like a death sentence.

On the other hand
, criminals can
be utilized
to do
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work
according to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
and talent they have.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
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crimes
don't have much impact and alleged guilty can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
second chance to civilize themselves.
For example
, cases such as purse snatching by juveniles can
be considered
as less impactful
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
crime and
they should
be taught
a lesson by making them to do the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. Another example, can be fighting of two
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on the road.
However
, if the same
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crime
happens
Consider replacing "in a repetitive manner" with the adverb for "repetitive"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a repetitive manner
by the same person then more strong action should
be levied
.

To conclude
,
however
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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crimes
for which lesson can
be taught
by making them do the
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work
, it should depend on the intensity if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
to punish or not to punish.
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n
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay what kind of reading material do you like to read most in your free time? Explain why you find this more interesting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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