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What is one of the most important decisions you have made? Why was this decision important? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v.2

What is one of the most important decisions you have made? Why was this decision important? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 2
Someday, everyone has to make an important decision in his or her life. Personally, I made the most important decision in my life when I graduated from university. I was thinking whether to apply for a PhD program and continue my education or work for a company. In what follows, I state my decision and explain why I made that decision. First, this decision was very important for me because it determined my career. I had two possible careers ahead: study for PhD and continue my career as a college professor, and second, work for a company as a consultant engineer. As far as I am concerned, teaching as a professor is less paid than an engineering job. On the other hand, a college professor can have more free time and vacation than an engineer working for a company. In addition, teaching at university is a routine job and sometimes disgusting. Teaching the same lessons each semester for years, dealing with students’ various problems etc. is not interesting for a person like me. In contrast, engineering involves challenges and problem solving, which I like and suits me well. Therefore, that is why I chose working as an engineer over teaching at university. Secondly, it was a long-term decision. One not only needs to study five to six years for PhD but also have to start a new lifestyle as a professor. In my view, I believe that a person’s job should be compatible with the person’s personality. If I do my favorite job, I can work better and more efficient. For example, when I was at university, in our math class, the professor gave me a very complex project. For I like math and computer programming, I managed to work 10 hours a day on computer, writing a personal computer code to solve some mathematical equations. What’s more, I can have more fun. Doing my favorite job in my entire life is very delightful rather than doing the job I do not like or worse, hate or forced to do. I think I made a right decision because I believe doing the job I like is very important. To sum up, my career choice after graduation from university is the most important decision in my life for the aforementioned reasons. Choosing a job that matches one’s personality and provides a reasonable income are the most important factors in decision-making. If so, the person can be more efficient and live happier.
Someday, everyone
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when I graduated from
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university
. I was thinking whether to apply for a PhD program and continue my education or
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work
for a
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company
. In what follows, I state my
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decision
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why I made that decision.

First
, this
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for me
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it determined my
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career
. I had two possible
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ahead: study for PhD and continue my
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career
as a college
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professor
, and second,
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for a
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company
as a consultant engineer. As far as I
am concerned
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teaching
as a
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professor
is less paid than an engineering
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.
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, a college
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professor
can have more free time and vacation than an engineer working for a
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company
.
In addition
,
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at
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is a routine
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job
and
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sometimes
disgusting.
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Teaching
the same lessons each semester for years, dealing with students’ various problems etc. is not interesting for a
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person
like me.
In contrast
, engineering involves challenges and problem solving, which I like and suits me well.
Therefore
,
that is
why I chose working as an engineer over
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teaching
at university.

Secondly
, it was a long-term
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needs to study five to six years for PhD
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also
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a new lifestyle as a
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professor
. In my view, I believe that a
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person’s
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job
should be compatible with the
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person’s
personality. If I do my favorite
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job
, I can
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better and more efficient.
For example
, when I was at
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, in our math
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, the
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gave me a
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complex project. For I like math and computer programming, I managed to
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10 hours a day on computer, writing a personal computer code to solve
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mathematical equations. What’s more, I can have more fun. Doing my favorite
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in my entire
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delightful
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I do not like or worse, hate or forced to do. I
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I made a right
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I believe doing the
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job
I like is
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To sum up, my
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career
choice after graduation from
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is the most
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in my
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for the aforementioned reasons. Choosing a
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that matches one’s personality and provides a reasonable income are the most
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important
factors in decision-making. If
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person
can be more efficient and
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live
happier.
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IELTS essay What is one of the most important decisions you have made? Why was this decision important? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
410 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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