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what games are popular in your country why Do you play any games Why Why not How do people learn to play games in your country Do you think it s important for people to play games Why Why not v. 1
Nowadays, nobody can deny traffic increasing exponentially and today solving or at least reducing traffic is an essence, also it affect our urban life quality in myriad aspects. However, many conventional solutions have been achievable for a couple of years, but it appears our cities, particularly metropolitans entire the planet has not overcome the challenge, therefore, we must cite viable ways to tackle it with both infrastructure and technological solutions, as we will see. In fact, urban's infrastructure was designed to be the backbone of cities and in recent century public transportation became one the main features of this ecosystem. However, with a brief look at Singapore as a role-model for many leading cities around the globe, despite various geographical and natural limitations in their area, they found the underground is the most sustainable and practical solution in the category and they were focused on it. In this case, it seems governors and authorities should develop on the public transportation with more distant future vision. On the other hand, to cutting down unnecessary travels and reducing traffic when the communication just is the matter efficient usage of the internet is advisable. Individuals can work and communicate via the internet, indeed, many people experience heavy congestion as a daily routine in rush hours when they go to work and vice versa, but with such technological improvements in data transfer, for instance, video call, E-mail and etc. , There is no more need to physical jobs that require transportation. Eventually, we should rely on the distance work and learn platforms to decrease the load specially in critical rush hours. To conclude, it seems for the first step as a responsible citizen we can cut down our daily need for movement by viable, modern, and technological solutions with both distance-learning and distance-working. Secondly, public transportation and metro development is crucial for the reduction of traffic load.
Nowadays, nobody can deny
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traffic
increasing
exponentially
and
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today
solving or at least reducing
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traffic
is an essence,
also
it
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affect
our urban life quality in myriad aspects.
However
,
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many
conventional
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solutions
have been achievable for a couple of years,
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but
it appears our cities,
particularly
metropolitans entire the planet has not overcome the challenge,
therefore
, we
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must
cite viable ways to tackle it with both infrastructure and technological
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solutions
, as we will
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see
.

In fact, urban's infrastructure
was designed
to be the backbone of cities and in recent century public
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transportation
became one the main features of this ecosystem.
However
, with a brief look at Singapore as a role-model for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
leading cities around the globe, despite various geographical and natural limitations in their area, they found the underground is the most sustainable and practical
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solution
in the
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category and
they
were focused
on it.
In this case
, it seems governors and authorities should develop on the public
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transportation
with more distant future vision.

On the other hand
, to cutting down unnecessary travels and reducing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
when the communication
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just
is the matter efficient usage of the internet is advisable. Individuals can work and communicate via the internet,
indeed
,
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many
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people
experience heavy congestion as a daily routine in rush hours when they go to work and vice versa,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
with such technological improvements in data transfer,
for instance
, video call, E-mail
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and etc
.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
There is no more need to physical jobs that require
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
.
Eventually
, we should rely on the distance work and learn platforms to decrease the load
specially
in critical rush hours.

To conclude
, it seems for the
first
step as a responsible citizen we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down our daily need for movement by viable, modern, and technological
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solutions
with both distance-learning and distance-working.
Secondly
, public
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transportation
and metro development is crucial for the reduction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
load.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay what games are popular in your country why Do you play any games Why Why not How do people learn to play games in your country Do you think it s important for people to play games Why Why not v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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