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Part 1What games are popular in your country? Why? Do you play any games? Why? How do people learn to play games in your country? Do you think it’s important for people to play games? v.1

Part 1What games are popular in your country? Why? Do you play any games? Why? How do people learn to play games in your country? Do you think it’s important for people to play games? v. 1
Nowadays, most of the government funds are allocated to space mission aids. I completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of money, and that the savings should be spent to other economic essentials such as public services. There are several reasons why the spending for the technology in space programs ought to be ceased. One of the main reasons for this view is that the facilities and equipment come at a huge cost. For this reason, there will be hardly any possibility to sufficiently fund other necessary sectors of the country such as health care, education if it is still underdeveloped. Another factor is that this activity might not be of benefit to everyone who lives in the country. A good illustration of this view is that this development will not be likely to profit teachers at all. From my personal perspective, it would be a wise decision if the government spending was assigned to public services. That is because it comes at a low cost as opposed to space exploration projects. What it more, it has a positive impact on every member of society. The public transport system would be the perfect epitome of this assertion as virtually everybody needs the strong sense of necessity towards them. Many people express a strong preference for making use of such transports which serve as a beneficial means to give a better quality of life. In conclusion, I would argue that government funding should be utilized to such essentials which incorporate beneficial sides for all individuals in the community.
Nowadays, most of the
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government
funds
are allocated
to space mission aids. I completely
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agree
with the
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idea
that these are a waste of money, and that the savings should
be spent
to other economic essentials such as public services.

There are several reasons why the spending for the technology in space programs ought to
be ceased
. One of the main reasons for this view is that the facilities and equipment
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
at a huge cost.
For this reason
, there will be hardly any possibility to
sufficiently
fund other necessary sectors of the country such as health care, education if it is
still
underdeveloped. Another factor is that this activity might not be of benefit to everyone who
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lives
in the country. A
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good
illustration of this view is that this development will not be likely to profit teachers at all.

From my personal perspective, it would be a wise decision if the
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government
spending
was assigned
to public services.
That is
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because
it
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comes
at a low cost as opposed to space exploration projects. What
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it
more, it has a
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positive
impact on every member of society. The public transport system would be the perfect epitome of this assertion as
virtually
everybody needs the strong sense of necessity towards them.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
express a strong preference for making
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of such transports which serve as a beneficial means to give a better quality of life.

In conclusion
, I would argue that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
funding should
be utilized
to such essentials which incorporate beneficial sides for all individuals in the community.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Part 1What games are popular in your country? Why? Do you play any games? Why? How do people learn to play games in your country? Do you think it’s important for people to play games? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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