Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The deadly coronavirus COVID-19 has spread to at least 69 countries, affecting all aspects of life. As part of its disastrous influence, Vietnamese schools at all levels have been closed for more than a month. There is a common argument that children should be allowed to go back to school for the sake of themselves, their family and the whole society. How far do you agree with this opinion? Your essay should be at least 250 words in length. v.1

The deadly coronavirus COVID-19 has spread to at least 69 countries, affecting all aspects of life. As part of its disastrous influence, Vietnamese schools at all levels have been closed for more than a month. There is a common argument that children should be allowed to go back to school for the sake of themselves, their family and the whole society. How far do you agree with this opinion? Your essay should be at least 250 words in length. v. 1
It seems apparent that spreading the SARS-CoV2 virus "without borders" is an alarming problem affecting many facets of life. Vietnam is also a country affected by this virus, and the government has granted all schools at all levels a break for more than 1 month. It widely believed that schools should welcome students back because of the advantages of themselves and related parties. To my ways of thinking, students should be at home to defend their health and diminish the spread in public. On the one hand, mortal coronavirus has the ability to spread swiftly. If schools allow students to return to school, the number of infected cases will boost exponentially because of the large number of students in a class. In fact, that in Korea and Japan, due to subjectivity and permission students going to school, the number of infections in these countries have become shocking data in recent days. Therefore, leaving students at home is a necessary method during this period. On the other hand, children cannot afford to protect themselves most safely from the epidemic. For instance, they usually tend to throw their masks when they feel hot or washing hands rapidly because of giddiness. Moreover, scientists indicated that children have weak immune systems, so they are also highly vulnerable to infection. Thus, students should be self-isolation at home so that they are taken care of and protected their heath until the disease tends to go down and the vaccine is found. In conclusion, despite some people’s view that schools should allow students to go back to school, I tend to think students had better stay at home to safeguard their health as well as avoid booming infection in the whole community.
It seems apparent that spreading the SARS-CoV2 virus
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
without borders
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
is an alarming problem affecting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
facets of life. Vietnam is
also
a country
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by this virus, and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has granted all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
at all levels a break for more than 1 month. It
widely
believed that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
should welcome
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
back
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the advantages of themselves and related parties. To my ways of thinking,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
should be at home to defend their health and diminish the spread in public.

On the one hand, mortal coronavirus has the ability to spread
swiftly
. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to return to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, the number of infected cases will boost
exponentially
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the large number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. In fact, that in Korea and Japan, due to subjectivity and permission
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
going to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, the number of infections in these countries have become shocking data in recent days.
Therefore
, leaving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
at home is a necessary method during this period.

On the other hand
, children cannot afford to protect themselves most
safely
from the epidemic.
For instance
, they
usually
tend to throw their masks when they feel hot or washing hands
rapidly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of giddiness.
Moreover
, scientists indicated that children have weak immune systems,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they are
also
highly
vulnerable to infection.
Thus
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
should be self-isolation at home
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they
are taken
care of and protected their heath until the disease tends to go down and the vaccine
is found
.

In conclusion
, despite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s view that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to go back to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, I tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
had better stay at home to safeguard their health
as well
as avoid booming infection in the whole community.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The deadly coronavirus COVID-19 has spread to at least 69 countries, affecting all aspects of life. As part of its disastrous influence, Vietnamese schools at all levels have been closed for more than a month. There is a common argument that children should be allowed to go back to school for the sake of themselves, their family and the whole society. How far do you agree with this opinion? Your essay should be at least 250 words in length. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts