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What are the tasks of universities to offer student knowledge and skills essential for their future career or to provide students with access to knowledge itself What do you think university education should contain v.1

What are the tasks of universities to offer student knowledge and skills essential for their future career or to provide students with access to knowledge itself What do you think university education should contain v. 1
Universities around the world are facing the problem of how to efficiently use their resource to serve a larger population of students that are more culturally and socially diversified. To solve the problem, universities should perfectly aware of their main tasks: providing students with easy access to knowledge and, at the same time, encouraging them to make active contributions to the advancement of human knowledge. Universities should, first of all, be learning communities where knowledge not only disseminated but also advanced. As full-fledged members of this community, students should not be information recipients who learn the knowledge in a passive way. Instead, they should be challenged to achieve their potential and, indeed, to excel. Therefore, rather than focus merely on knowledge dissemination and transfer, universities should contrive to provide learning conditions that encourage students to remain curious, to value diversity in opinions and perspectives, and to think critically and communicate effectively. In this way, students can gain problem-solving experience and confidence. Furthermore, universities will never attain their goals if they tailor all their courses or programs to meet the needs of specific employers or occupational sectors. Today’s social environment is more dynamic and turbulent than ever before. Only those graduates who possess certain personality traits and can do well in diversified situations can distinguish themselves from other job applicants In short, in order to fulfill the main tasks of universities, university education should contain ample opportunities for independent learning which can cultivate students who are more likely to adapt to the changing society. Students can also learn to exercise their autonomy more effectively, and they may clarify their own professional interests while learning in an independent way.
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Universities
around the world are facing the problem of how to
efficiently
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use
their resource to serve a larger population of
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students
that are more
culturally
and
socially
diversified. To solve the problem,
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universities
should
perfectly
aware of their main tasks: providing
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students
with easy access to
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knowledge
and, at the same time, encouraging them to
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make
active contributions to the advancement of human knowledge.

Universities should,
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first of all
, be
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learning
communities where
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knowledge
not
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only
disseminated
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but
also
advanced. As full-fledged members of this community,
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students
should not be information recipients who learn the
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knowledge
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in a passive way
.
Instead
, they should
be challenged
to achieve their potential and,
indeed
, to excel.
Therefore
,
rather
than focus
merely
on
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knowledge
dissemination and transfer,
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universities
should contrive to provide
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learning
conditions that encourage
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students
to remain curious, to value diversity in opinions and perspectives, and to
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think
critically
and communicate
effectively
. In this way,
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students
can gain problem-solving experience and confidence.
Furthermore
,
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universities
will never attain their goals if they tailor all their courses or programs to
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meet
the needs of specific employers or occupational sectors.
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Today
’s social environment is more dynamic and turbulent than ever
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before
.
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Only
those graduates who possess certain personality traits and can do well in diversified situations can distinguish themselves from other job
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applicants


In short, in order to fulfill the main tasks of
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universities
,
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university
education should contain ample opportunities for independent
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learning
which can cultivate
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students
who are more likely to adapt to the changing society.
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Students
can
also
learn to exercise their autonomy more
effectively
, and they may clarify their
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own
professional interests while
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learning
Consider replacing "in an independent way" with the adverb for "independent"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an independent way
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What are the tasks of universities to offer student knowledge and skills essential for their future career or to provide students with access to knowledge itself What do you think university education should contain v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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