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What are the main advantages or disadvantages of living in a metro v.1

What are the main advantages or disadvantages of living in a metro v. 1
Metropolitan city is always a charming place for everyone to live with numerous facilities. There cities offer many positive effects, however, the dark side cannot be neglected. This essay will discuss about these pros and cons of living in an urban area. Admittedly, the main merit of living in a big town is that education and health facilities are bright where everyone can avail them. To illustrate, school systems in an urban area are remarkably better than in a remote area. Moreover, medical emergencies are well handled in a large area. In addition, these places provide immense opportunities for white and blue collar workers where anyone can support themselves. However, beside these pros, there are many cons of living in metro areas. Firstly, these areas are densely populated with uncontrollable traffic that make environment highly polluted. Traffic and noise pollution lead to undesirable health issue like asthma, lung infections. Secondly, lack of pleasant greenery and nature supplement pollution index of these congested places and ultimately, such environment become hazardous for survival. For example, recent statistics of Lahore, one of the metropolitan cities of Pakistan, has exceeded the safe limit and reached up to 400 which is generally considered harmful for breathing. To conclude, there are many benefits of choosing urban areas for living due to the remarkable facilities of life, whereas, drawbacks can also be extremely dangerous like overpopulation and pollution.
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with numerous facilities. There cities offer
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many
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positive
effects,
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, the dark side cannot
be neglected
. This essay will
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discuss about these
pros and cons of
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living
in an urban area.

Admittedly
, the main merit of
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living
in a
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big
town is that education and health facilities are bright where everyone can avail them. To illustrate, school systems in an urban
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area
are
remarkably
better than in a remote
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area
.
Moreover
, medical emergencies are well handled in a large
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area
.
In addition
, these places provide immense opportunities for white and blue collar workers where anyone can support themselves.

However
, beside these pros, there are
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many
cons of
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living
in metro
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areas
.
Firstly
, these
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areas
are
densely
populated with uncontrollable traffic that
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make
environment
highly
polluted. Traffic and noise pollution lead to undesirable health issue like asthma, lung infections.
Secondly
, lack of pleasant greenery and nature supplement pollution index of these congested places and
ultimately
, such environment become hazardous for survival.
For example
, recent statistics of Lahore, one of the metropolitan cities of Pakistan, has exceeded the safe limit and reached up to 400 which is
generally
considered harmful for breathing.

To conclude
, there are
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many
benefits of choosing urban
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areas
for
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living
due to the remarkable facilities of life, whereas, drawbacks can
also
be
extremely
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dangerous
like overpopulation and pollution.
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IELTS essay What are the main advantages or disadvantages of living in a metro v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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