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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or diagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.1

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 1
There is a view that appying a surge in the price of petrol can help in mitigating the traffic and pollution related concerns. I perceive that this can certainly be one of the effective measures; however, getting rid of such issues should be taken as a multi-pronged approach and requires not only government, but also individuals to participate equally. To begin with, admittedly, increase in petrol cost can solve traffic and pollution problems, as with a rise in the expenditure on petrol, people may start avoiding using their vehicles as much as possible. With lesser number of cars on roads, a significant fall may be recorded in the level of sound and air pollution. For instance, in India, owing to the sky-rocketing fuel prices, most individuals now prefer taking public transport over their own vehicles, and it has proven to be a successful measure in many Southern cities. Nevertheless, prices can only be raised delibritely upto a certain extent and hence, there are chances of failure in implementing this measure alone. Cominng to other methodologies that can be used to decrease the traffic and pollution level, one is implementation of stringent rules by the government. Fear of law is important to enforce good conduct among people, therefore, such regulations, if implemented, may help in making people aware as well as responsible towards these world-wide problems. To illustrate, Delhi government applied odd-even vehicle rule, as a result of which they witnessed a shocking improvement in the quality of air, as the citizens also followed the rule responsibly. Additionally, individuals can also contribute by using public transport and by travelling in groups using carpools. Above-mentioned ways can definitely result in decreased traffic and pollution level. To conclude, hike in the petrol prices can surely aid in dropping the rush on the roads, in turn, reducing the air and sound pollution level. Although I opine such an approach should be collaborated with other equally crucial methods which involves government to implement strict rules and people to follow them diligently.
There is a view that
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appying
a surge in the
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price
of
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petrol
can
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help
in mitigating the
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traffic
and
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pollution
related concerns. I perceive that this can
certainly
be one of the effective measures;
however
, getting rid of such issues should
be taken
as a multi-pronged approach and requires not
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only
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government
,
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but
also
individuals to participate
equally
.

To
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begin
with,
admittedly
, increase in
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petrol
cost can solve
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traffic
and
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pollution
problems, as with a rise in the expenditure on
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petrol
,
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people
may
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start
avoiding using their vehicles as much as possible. With lesser number of cars on roads, a significant fall may
be recorded
in the level of sound and air
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pollution
.
For instance
, in India, owing to the sky-rocketing fuel
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prices
, most individuals
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now
prefer taking public transport over their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
vehicles, and it has proven to be a successful measure in
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many
Southern cities.
Nevertheless
,
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prices
can
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only
be raised
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delibritely
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upto
a certain extent and
hence
, there are chances of failure in implementing this measure alone.

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Cominng
to other methodologies that can be
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used
to decrease the
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traffic
and
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pollution
level, one is implementation of stringent
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rules
by the
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government
. Fear of law is
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important
to enforce
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
conduct among
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people
,
therefore
, such regulations, if implemented, may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in making
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people
aware
as well
as responsible towards these world-wide problems. To illustrate, Delhi
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government
applied odd-even vehicle
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rule
,
as a result
of which they witnessed a shocking improvement in the quality of air, as the citizens
also
followed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rule
responsibly
.
Additionally
, individuals can
also
contribute by using public transport and by travelling in groups using carpools. Above-mentioned ways can definitely result in decreased
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
level.

To conclude
, hike in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
petrol
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
can
surely
aid in dropping the rush on the roads, in turn, reducing the air and sound
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
level. Although I opine such an approach should
be collaborated
with other
equally
crucial methods which involves
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
to implement strict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rules
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to follow them
diligently
.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
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