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What are the important characters in a group member? Why are they important? Include details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

What are the important characters in a group member? Why are they important? Include details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
Nowadays the administration of the various nations pays much higher attention to improve the economy, ignoring the rest of the issues. While ignoring other key issues may disappoint some people, when economy flourishes it improves the most of the aspects of their life. On the one hand, the primary demerit of just focusing on growth with financial aspect is it deters the council to spend on public interest projects. In other words, if during the proposal of projects their feasibility is checked with respect to the financial gains, many times the projects which do not directly provide return on investment may suffer. For example, The National Health Service programme in the United Kingdom provides free health care to its citizens, if the Government will invest this money in building special economic zones or technology parks instead of public health care their citizens will be in trouble. However, with an increase in the income they can pay for it on their own. On the other hand, the merit can be seen as with the improved economy the overall happiness index of the Nation improves. This is because, to boost the economy various steps needs to be taken like improving the public transport, creating more jobs, ease of doing business, this will improve the overall life of their citizens and brings economic prosperity. Hence, it will improve the overall standard of living. For instance, The UAE Government has spent an enormous amount of money on their infrastructure development and has implemented business friendly policies to attract the businesses throughout the world and today their local people have more jobs and incomes which was not the case before 20 years. In conclusion, when the Governments give higher priorities to economic development rather than other issues even though its citizen might be unhappy with some aspects it can definitely improve their life in the long run.
Nowadays the administration of the various nations pays much higher attention to
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improve
the
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economy
, ignoring the rest of the issues. While ignoring
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other
key issues may disappoint
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some
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people
, when
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economy
flourishes it
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improves
the most of the aspects of their life.

On the one hand, the primary demerit of
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just
focusing on growth with financial aspect is it deters the council to spend on public interest projects. In
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other
words, if during the proposal of projects their feasibility is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
with respect to the financial gains,
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many
times the projects which do not
directly
provide return on investment may suffer.
For example
, The National Health Service
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programme
in the United Kingdom provides free health care to its
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citizens
, if the
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Government
will invest this money in building special economic zones or technology parks
instead
of public health care their
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citizens
will be in trouble.
However
, with an increase in the income they can pay for it on their
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own
.

On the
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other
hand, the merit can be
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seen
as with the
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improved
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economy
the
overall
happiness index of the Nation
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improves
. This is
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because
, to boost the
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economy
various steps needs to
be taken
like improving the public transport, creating more jobs,
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ease
of doing business, this will
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improve
the
overall
life of their
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citizens
and brings economic prosperity.
Hence
, it will
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improve
the
overall
standard of living.
For instance
, The UAE
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Government
has spent an enormous amount of money on their infrastructure development and has implemented business friendly policies to attract the businesses throughout the world and
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today
their local
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people
have more jobs and incomes which was not the case
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before
20 years.

In conclusion
, when the
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Governments
give higher priorities to economic development
rather
than
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other
issues
even though
its
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citizen
might be unhappy with
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some
aspects it can definitely
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improve
their life in the long run.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What are the important characters in a group member? Why are they important? Include details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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