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What are the good characteristics of a good teacher? Use reasons and details to support your response. v.1

What are the good characteristics of a good teacher? Use reasons and details to support your response. v. 1
Nowadays, people are enduring from difficult life situations; they are more stressed than ever before. In this essay, I will discuss why life has become so difficult and how this situation can be changed. To begin with, the central reason behind stressful life is increased competition in every field of life, such as education, employment, and even sports. Students and employees, for example, are pressurized by their parents and employers respectively to perform better than the others. This makes them anxious and stressful because they feel overwhelmed by the expectations of associated persons. Another reason that leads to a stressful life is maintaining a high social status. People often spend more than their earnings, especially on their marriages, only to impress other people, and this makes their financial position even worse. Though changing such an environment is difficult, there are some plausible solutions to it. Firstly, although competition is good for one's growth, it must not destroy one's inner peace. People ought to be encouraged to compete, but they should not be overburdened with unrealistic expectations. Moreover, by discouraging unhealthy practices, where people are expected to spend their life savings, will release people from stress. For instance, dowry is one of the many underlying reasons for stress for people living in Asian countries. It will be beneficial for many if this trend can be banned legally. In conclusion, there is no denying that people are stressed more these days owing to competition and financial burden. A right set of thoughts and policies, such as restrictions on unnecessary expenses, can help improve the contemporary situation.
Nowadays,
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people
are enduring from difficult
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life
situations; they are more
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stressed
than ever
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before
. In this essay, I will discuss why
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life
has become
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so
difficult and how this situation can be
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changed
.

To
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begin
with, the central reason behind stressful
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life
is increased
competition in every field of
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life
, such as education, employment, and even sports. Students and employees,
for example
,
are pressurized
by their parents and employers
respectively
to perform better than the others. This
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makes
them anxious and stressful
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because
they feel overwhelmed by the expectations of associated persons. Another reason that leads to a stressful
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life
is maintaining a high social status.
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People
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often
spend more than their earnings,
especially
on their marriages,
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only
to impress other
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people
, and this
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makes
their financial position even worse.

Though changing such an environment is difficult, there are
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some
plausible solutions to it.
Firstly
, although competition is
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good
for one's growth, it
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must
not
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destroy
one's inner peace.
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People
ought to
be encouraged
to compete,
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but
they should not
be overburdened
with unrealistic expectations.
Moreover
, by discouraging unhealthy practices, where
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people
are
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expected
to spend their
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life
savings, will release
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people
from
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stress
.
For instance
, dowry is one of the
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many
underlying reasons for
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stress
for
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people
living in Asian countries. It will be beneficial for
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many
if this trend can
be banned
legally
.

In conclusion
, there is no denying that
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people
are
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stressed
more these days owing to competition and financial burden. A right set of thoughts and policies, such as restrictions on unnecessary expenses, can
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help
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the contemporary situation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay What are the good characteristics of a good teacher? Use reasons and details to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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