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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society? To what extent do you agree? In the current world, The usage of technology is constantly on the rise. v.2

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society? In the current world, The usage of technology is constantly on the rise. v. 2
In the current scenario, The management of technology is constantly on the rise. For instance, social website like Facebook, WhatsApp, Linkedin, etc. Which has had a negative impact on one's individuality as well as on Society. I support this statement which states that social site had a false impact on people. Analysing the advantages and limitations of a networking site will prove this. To commence with, there are several reasons to Support the fact. Firstly, the usage of socializing apps such as Facebook, tinder, WhatsApp, Linkedin, etc. Are one of the reasons for communication gap between families. For instance, In the past, people had time to spend with their parents while in the present due to the foundation of apps Large number had become obsessed with these apps, especially the teenagers. Moreover, laziness is one of a negative impact of networking website, loneliness, depression, etc. Therefore, due these new technologies it is common to see parents spending more time with their cell phone then with their children. On the other hand, despite all these disadvantages It has its own advantages such as finding new people, awareness about the things that are happening around your surroundings, getting Location for trying new foods and so on. For instance, with the help of these technologies it is easy to find childhood friends, learning about new things, communication with people who are far away from you. In the end the social website has its positive and negative effect which can be minimized by taking certain measures. For example, Keeping a time limit on using these apps, Taking part in extracurricular activities, giving equal importance to family members and social sites. Hence, it is common for people to maintain a balance by managing the use of socializing apps. In the end, I would like to Conclude by saying that spending more hours on socializing sites will lead to laziness, loneliness, depression etc. Therefore, it is necessary for people to maintain balance in the management of technologies.
In the
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current
scenario, The management of
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technology
is
constantly
on the rise.
For instance
,
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social
website like Facebook, WhatsApp,
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Linkedin
, etc. Which has had a
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negative
impact on one's individuality
as well
as on Society. I support this statement which states that
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social
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site
had a false impact on
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people
.
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Analysing
the advantages and limitations of a networking
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site
will prove this.

To commence with, there are several reasons to Support the fact.
Firstly
, the usage of socializing apps such as Facebook, tinder, WhatsApp,
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Linkedin
, etc. Are one of the reasons for communication gap between families.
For instance
, In the past,
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people
had time to spend with their parents while in the present due to the foundation of apps Large number had become obsessed with these apps,
especially
the
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teenagers
.
Moreover
, laziness is one of a
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negative
impact of networking website, loneliness, depression, etc.
Therefore
, due these
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new
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technologies
it is common to
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see
parents spending more time with their cell phone then with their children.

On the other hand
, despite all these disadvantages It has its
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own
advantages such as finding
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new
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people
, awareness about the things that are happening around your surroundings, getting Location for trying
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new
foods and
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so
on.
For instance
, with the
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help
of these
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technologies
it is easy to find childhood friends, learning about
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new
things, communication with
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people
who are far away from you. In the
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end
the
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social
website has its
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positive
and
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negative
effect which can
be minimized
by taking certain measures.
For example
, Keeping a time limit on using these apps, Taking part in extracurricular activities, giving equal importance to family members and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sites
.
Hence
, it is common for
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people
to maintain a balance by managing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of socializing apps.

In the
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end
, I would like
to Conclude
by saying that spending more hours on socializing
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sites
will lead to laziness, loneliness, depression etc.
Therefore
, it is necessary for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to maintain balance in the management of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technologies
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society? In the current world, The usage of technology is constantly on the rise. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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