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what are the causes and effects of water pollution? what are the solutions? v.2

what are the causes and effects of water pollution? what are the solutions? v. 2
Water is the primary crucial element of life which contamination is a major problem that would face the life of beings on the earth. Water pollution has very undesirable effects on our life and remedies must be quickly introduced. Human is the primary cause of water pollution by his anti-nature actions. Firstly, wrong domestic activities such as bathing and washing clothes and utensils in rivers and pools contaminate water. Moreover, discharging industrial and sewage wastes into fresh water sources is a very effective reason for this problem. For example, factories produce a lot of bi-products and wastes, and they make it easy to get rid of their “costly to dispose away” wastes by throwing it in rivers. Furthermore, the lake of well-organized governmental means for the disposal of household garbage in some poor countries leads people to throw their wastes into close rivers and pools. This human manner has very dangerous effects on humankind and other beings on the earth. First, Consumption of polluted water results in many diseases, including cholera and typhoid. Secondly, contaminated water has a horrible impact on the aquatic life. To illustrate, most of beings that live in water can’t resist the need to clean and pure water. Lastly, purifying water is a very costly step, especially for poor countries. In fact, the solutions can be introduced simply by avoiding causes as a preventive action. Governmental strict rules must be applied to change behaviours that turn water from its beneficial phase to hazardous phase. For instance, it must be illegal to dispose garbage or discharge any wastes either sewage or industrial wastes into fresh water sources. Strict punishment must be applied to violators. Additionally, scientific methods must be used to purify water and make it drinkable again. In other words, purification plants must be constructed for that mission. In conclusion, it must be taken seriously to keep water sources as clean as possible and hands must join to rescue the life on the earth which is established on water as a primary element of life. Such quick preventive procedures are the best way to live without diseases and keep other beings alive.
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is the primary crucial element of
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life
which contamination is a major problem that would face the
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life
of beings on the earth.
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pollution has
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very
undesirable effects on our
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life
and remedies
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must
be
quickly
introduced.

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water
pollution by his anti-nature actions.
Firstly
,
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wrong
domestic activities such as bathing and washing clothes and utensils in rivers and pools contaminate
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water
.
Moreover
, discharging industrial and sewage
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wastes
into fresh
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water
sources is a
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very
effective reason for this problem.
For example
, factories produce
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a lot of
bi-products and
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wastes
, and they
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make
it easy to
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get
rid of their “costly to dispose away”
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wastes
by throwing it in rivers.
Furthermore
, the lake of well-organized governmental means for the disposal of household garbage in
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some
poor countries leads
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people
to throw their
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wastes
into close rivers and pools.

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very
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dangerous
effects on humankind and other beings on the earth.
First
, Consumption of polluted
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water
results in
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many
diseases, including cholera and typhoid.
Secondly
, contaminated
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water
has a horrible impact on the aquatic
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life
. To illustrate,
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most of beings
that
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live
in
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water
can’t resist the need to clean and pure
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water
.
Lastly
, purifying
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water
is a
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very
costly step,
especially
for poor countries.

In fact, the solutions can
be introduced
simply
by avoiding causes as a preventive action. Governmental strict
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rules
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must
be applied
to
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change
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behaviours
that turn
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from its beneficial phase to hazardous phase.
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, it
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must
be illegal to dispose garbage or discharge any
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wastes
either sewage or industrial
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wastes
into fresh
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water
sources. Strict punishment
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must
be applied
to violators.
Additionally
, scientific methods
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be
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used
to purify
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water
and
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make
it drinkable again.
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, purification plants
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must
be constructed
for that mission.

In conclusion
, it
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must
be taken
seriously
to
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keep
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water
sources as clean as possible and hands
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must
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join
to rescue the
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life
on the earth which
is established
on
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water
as a primary element of
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life
. Such quick preventive procedures are the best way to
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live
without diseases and
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keep
other beings alive.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay what are the causes and effects of water pollution? what are the solutions? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
356 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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