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what are the advantages and disadvantages of online studying? v.1

what are the advantages and disadvantages of online studying? v. 1
In the first global assessment of the impact of the corona virus, everything from economics to daily life has been seriously affected, especially the children’s study as their parents are concerned. To make amends for this, the Department of Education and Training has required many schools in some particular areas to teach online. While many students use this as a beneficial aid in learning while others think that it is not as effective as classroom teaching. This essay below will discuss the merits and demerits of distance learning. It is undoubtedly true that distance learning is convenient and flexible. Firstly, you can’t deny that this idea can help you save time and energy since you don’t have to travel. For example, if you learn online, you only have to prepare several essential items and open your laptop or phone, …, then learn like you always do in class. Second, it is common knowledge that online lectures can be recorded; therefore, you can just replay it whenever or wherever you want to: in the early morning, while eating, after work, …. This helps a lot if you have struggled with comprehending a lesson and are too shy to ask your teacher. For instance, while you are doing housework, you could just open the record on your phone and listen. On the other hand, this method might also have some drawbacks. To learn productively, children need effective self-motivation which may bring big trouble to some lazy pupils who try to ignore the study, because when we learn like that, teachers hardly can control the class and they will have a chance to play truant without getting caught. Another disadvantage of this is that there will be no laboratory experiments since students don’t have enough facilities and experiences to do this on their own at home. From the essay I have made above, it can be concluded that the advantages of distance learning outweigh any disadvantages it has. In my opinion, online learning is very helpful if the user knows how to utilize it.
In the
first
global assessment of the impact of the
The term "coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
corona virus
, everything from economics to daily life has been
seriously
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affected
,
especially
the children’s study as their parents
are concerned
. To
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make
amends for this, the Department of Education and Training has required
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many
schools in
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some
particular areas to teach
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online
. While
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many
students
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use
this as a beneficial aid in
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learning
while others
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think
that it is not as effective as classroom teaching. This essay below will discuss the merits and demerits of distance learning.

It is
undoubtedly
true that distance
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
is convenient and flexible.
Firstly
, you can’t deny that this
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idea
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you save time and energy since you don’t
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have to
travel.
For example
, if you
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learn
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online
, you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
prepare several essential items and open your laptop or phone, …, then
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
like you always do in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. Second, it is common knowledge that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
lectures can
be recorded
;
therefore
, you can
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
replay it whenever or wherever you want to: in the early morning, while eating, after work, …. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
a lot if you have struggled with comprehending a lesson and are too shy to ask your teacher.
For instance
, while you are doing housework, you could
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
open the record on your phone and listen.

On the other hand
, this method might
also
have
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some
drawbacks. To
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learn
productively
, children need effective self-motivation which may bring
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big
trouble to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
lazy pupils who try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
the study,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
when we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
like that, teachers hardly can control the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
class and
they will have a chance to play truant without getting caught. Another disadvantage of this is that there will be no laboratory experiments since students don’t have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
facilities and experiences to do this on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
at home.

From the essay I have made above, it can
be concluded
that the advantages of distance
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learning
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outweigh
any disadvantages it has. In my opinion,
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
is
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very
helpful if the user knows how to utilize it.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay what are the advantages and disadvantages of online studying? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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