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What are important qualities of a good supervisor(boss)? Why these qualities are important. v.2

What are important qualities of a good supervisor(boss)? Why these qualities are important. v. 2
Nowadays, in the most companies and factories are managed with a competent boss to get more correspondence and more collaboration between workers and supervisor to reach the best economic condition. In my opinion, I prefer that a supervisor is being more a decent manager to establish firm role to more collaboration, also the supervisor should have good behavior with one’s workers. Therefore, I explain my reasons hereunder. First and foremost, in every company has the various of difficualties to run the company with high effeicency and best productivity. With this regard, controlling and dicsipling each member of factories is needed to a decent manager for managing all of stuffs are arising in the atmosphere of companies. Additionally, a decent manager should adopt a comprehensive program for handling every situation will be occurred and he or she has thoroughly programs to cross any obstecale, originating from autonomos plan, to carry company to zenith of success. For example, when I was a boss for a car-making company, stagnation condition is emerged in particular time, I tried to save my companies with some money resources predicted for this time. I think I could save my company from failure when I had a program for overcoming any problem with the wisely necessary predicts. Secondly, when facing with suitable behavior from other people, people are making their attempts to answer this specific behavior with appropraite acts. Therefore, in the environment of company, if workers see right act from their boss, they will attempt for progressing the companies without any compulsory. On the other hand, the boss has insufficient strict behavior, his or her employees do not any attempt for flourishing their company. Consequently, the yield of company is substantially declined just with a wrong behavior from their boss to provide a friendly atmosphere to fulfill employees’ needs. As standpoint of statistic from Asian countries shows that the companies have boss with awful behavior have less profit than companies have kind behavior boss. All in all, a competent supervisor can cause on success or failure of a company. I think a competent supervisor should not only be a decent manager to save company from collapsing, but also has a good behavior to make kind place for employees.
Nowadays, in the most
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companies
and factories
are managed
with a competent boss to
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get
more correspondence and more collaboration between workers and
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supervisor
to reach the best economic condition. In my opinion, I prefer that a
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supervisor
is being more a
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decent
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manager
to establish firm role to more collaboration,
also
the
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supervisor
should have
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good
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behavior
with one’s workers.
Therefore
, I
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explain
my reasons hereunder.

First
and foremost, in every
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company
has
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the various of
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difficualties
to run the
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company
with high
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effeicency
and best productivity. With this regard, controlling and
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dicsipling
each member of factories
is needed
to a
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decent
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manager
for managing
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all of stuffs
are arising in the atmosphere of
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companies
.
Additionally
, a
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decent
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manager
should adopt a comprehensive program for handling every situation will be
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occurred and
he or she has
thoroughly
programs to cross any
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obstecale
, originating from
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autonomos
plan, to carry
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company
to zenith of success.
For example
, when I was a boss for a car-making
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company
, stagnation condition
is emerged
in particular
time, I tried to save my
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companies
with
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some
money resources predicted for this time. I
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think
I could save my
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company
from failure when I had a program for overcoming any problem with the
wisely
necessary predicts.

Secondly
, when facing with suitable
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behavior
from other
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people
,
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people
are making their attempts to answer this specific
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behavior
with
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appropraite
acts.
Therefore
, in the environment of
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company
, if workers
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see
right act from their boss, they will attempt for progressing the
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companies
without any compulsory.
On the other hand
, the boss has insufficient strict
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behavior
,
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his or her
employees do not any attempt for flourishing their
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company
.
Consequently
, the yield of
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company
is
substantially
declined
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just
with a
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wrong
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behavior
from their boss to provide a friendly atmosphere to fulfill employees’ needs. As standpoint of statistic from Asian countries
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shows
that the
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companies
have boss with awful
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behavior
have less profit than
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companies
have kind
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behavior
boss.

All in all, a competent
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supervisor
can cause on success or failure of a
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company
. I
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think
a competent
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supervisor
should not
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only
be a
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decent
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manager
to save
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company
from collapsing,
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but
also
has a
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good
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behavior
to
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make
kind place for employees.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay What are important qualities of a good supervisor(boss)? Why these qualities are important. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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