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Organized tour to remote community and other countries is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and environment? v.8

Organized tour to remote community and other countries is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and environment? v. 8
Picnic make every one cheer up and offer to get wide knowledge regarding certain places like villages or countryside are escalating recently. Nowadays many people are trying to travel such rural areas to visit and enjoy the reasonable climate and heritage. In this essay explain about the pro and cons of such attitude, and elaborate the negative outcome of inhabitants and ecosystem over the fact of knowledge and fewer development. On the one hand, uncontrolled visit of some scenery in pastoral sites would distract the natural resources, privacy and stability. Mainly, habitat become endangered by the excess use of disposable wastes like plastic bottles and vessels. For example, rivers, lakes and valleys are occupied with many garbage materials and transport development harm the normal surroundings badly reports a famous environmentalist in Kerala, India. In addition, indigenous people may have detrimental effect on their daily lives in terms of safe, security and solitude life as well. Like the comments of people from Masanagudi a remote area of Tamilnadu district has face many problem related to trucking and excess vehicles make health problems and sound pollution. On the other hand, support to the grateful progress achieve benefit not only to the community but also to the environment in some extent. At once, increasing visitors would lead to enhancement of transport facilities and expansion of undeveloped places in rural areas. For instance, silent valley was an unknown place for many years until someone discovered the tourist value of that. Furthermore, many natives has got job as per the development and exaggerating guests. Rural development may also lead to travel and tourism departs with financial growth. In conclusion, although exaggerating tourist to the small remote places become popular and sustainable development for the community, most of the results shows, that would have negative features to the private life of hosts along with environmental permanence.
Picnic
make
every one cheer up and offer to
get
wide knowledge regarding certain
places
like villages or countryside are escalating recently. Nowadays
many
people
are trying to travel such rural areas to visit and enjoy the reasonable climate and heritage. In this essay
explain
about the pro and cons of such attitude, and elaborate the
negative
outcome of inhabitants and ecosystem over the fact of knowledge and fewer development.

On the one hand, uncontrolled visit of
some
scenery in pastoral sites would distract the natural resources, privacy and stability.
Mainly
, habitat become endangered by the excess
use
of disposable wastes like plastic bottles and vessels.
For example
, rivers, lakes and valleys
are occupied
with
many
garbage materials and transport
development
harm the normal surroundings
badly
reports a
famous
environmentalist in Kerala, India.
In addition
, indigenous
people
may have detrimental effect on their daily
lives
in terms of safe, security and solitude life
as well
. Like the comments of
people
from
Masanagudi
a remote area of
Tamilnadu
district has
face
many
problem related to trucking and excess vehicles
make
health problems and sound pollution.

On the other hand
, support to the grateful progress achieve benefit not
only
to the community
but
also
to the environment in
some
extent. At once, increasing visitors would lead to enhancement of transport facilities and expansion of undeveloped
places
in rural areas.
For instance
, silent valley was an unknown
place
for
many
years until someone discovered the tourist value of that.
Furthermore
,
many
natives has
got
job as per the
development
and exaggerating guests. Rural
development
may
also
lead to travel and tourism departs with financial growth.

In conclusion
, although exaggerating tourist to the
small
remote
places
become popular and sustainable
development
for the community, most of the results
shows
, that would have
negative
features to the private life of hosts along with environmental permanence.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Organized tour to remote community and other countries is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and environment? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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