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Wearing uniforms is popular in schools, but some people argue that it might cause damage to children's individuality. What is your opinion? v.1

Wearing uniforms is popular in schools, but some people argue that it might cause damage to children's individuality. What is your opinion? v. 1
Across the world, considering investing in business is getting rapidly popular. For underdeveloped states, it creates a way for the economy, while also posses certain obstacles. This essay will discuss both arguments in detail about what are the benefits and drawbacks of allowing the companies to begin a business. Undoubtedly, developing states have various benefits. Firstly, investing in an underdeveloped country helps it financially to bring foreign exchange reserves in central bank that are used to trade throughout the world, which support to grow Grand Domestic Product along with the economy and reduce the cost of related imported products. Secondly, enhancing of multinational company’s investment increase per capita for organizations through manufacturing sectors and the difference in value of currency as well as boosts their business. For instance, considering the investment of the KIA Company in Pakistan, which has helped to the rise of foreign exchange reserves and selling products. Consequently, the foreign allocators drive an economy of a certain country and build trade for company. Granted permission to invest in a country also contains drawbacks. Firstly, it raises hindrances for the market share domestic manufactured products as well as local dispense money, by what country’s origin organizations May face loss. Secondly, halting the business of investing companies owing to political situation as well as temporary sanctions on a country. Therefore, the trade might convert into negative. For example, considering Iran, which has been suffering from international sanctions. The accounts of proration companies have been frozen and cannot bounce back. Hence, the international and domestics effects may create troubles for both foreign cooperation at any instance. In conclusion, the international business or allocation provides support to economy of a country, but may remain alert for foreign pressure or reaction at any time
Across the world, considering investing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
is getting
rapidly
popular. For underdeveloped states, it creates a way for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
, while
also
posses certain obstacles. This essay will discuss both arguments in detail about what are the benefits and drawbacks of allowing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
a business.

Undoubtedly
, developing states have various benefits.
Firstly
, investing in an underdeveloped
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country
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
it
financially
to bring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
exchange reserves in central bank that are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to trade throughout the world, which support to grow Grand Domestic
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Product
along with the
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economy
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the cost of related imported
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products
.
Secondly
, enhancing of multinational
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company’s
investment increase per capita for organizations through manufacturing sectors and the difference in value of currency
as well
as boosts their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
.
For instance
, considering the investment of the KIA
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Company
in Pakistan, which has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to the rise of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
exchange reserves and selling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
Consequently
, the
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foreign
allocators drive an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
of a certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
and build trade for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Granted permission to invest in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
also
contains drawbacks.
Firstly
, it raises hindrances for the market share domestic manufactured
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
as well
as local dispense money, by what
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country’s
origin organizations May face loss.
Secondly
, halting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
of investing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
owing to political situation
as well
as temporary sanctions on a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
Therefore
, the trade might convert into
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
.
For example
, considering Iran, which has been suffering from international sanctions. The accounts of proration
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
have
been frozen
and cannot bounce back.
Hence
, the international and domestics effects may create troubles for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
cooperation at any instance.

In conclusion
, the international
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business
or allocation provides support to
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economy
of a
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country
,
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but
may remain alert for
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foreign
pressure or reaction at any time
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Wearing uniforms is popular in schools, but some people argue that it might cause damage to children's individuality. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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