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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. v. 9

It is argued that well off nations should let more displaced people in their countries and give them essential aid for free such as food, beverages and dwelling. This essay completely agrees with that statement because the public can help those people physically and mentally and employ them to make up for a lack of workforce. Rich countries should accept more refugees because they can help to improve their health and mental illness. People who are persecuted and fled to another country are more likely to suffer from health problems because of inadequate food resources and become malnutritional. Furthermore, they tend to have lower self esteem and are depressed as they think they do not have bright future in their countries owing to violence and war. For example, Japan Times reported that figures of BMI of refugees were lower than the average of civilians living in Japan and the people escaped from their countries were anxious of their futures. Another reason why rich nations should allow refugees to enter their countries are because firms that are short of employees can fill in with them. The less staff a company has, the more difficult it will be to run their business efficiently, however people who just landed on a country would seek for jobs to make a living. It is more cost effective for an organisation because they do not have to hire them with high wage. For instance, I used to work in a shipping company and saw the tendency that a majority of foreign people had night shifts as their wedge were higher than that of day shifts and the employees entrusted them easy duties with not higher wedge compared to Japanese workers because they could not speak Japanese. In conclusion, it could be preferable for developed countries to sanction refugees to cross the boarders by serving the essentials to them because citizens can help out those people’s health and mental, and allocate work to them to operate their business efficiently.

It is argued
 that well off nations should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 more displaced You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 in their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 and give them essential aid for free such as food, beverages and dwelling. This essay completely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesces
agrees
 with that statement This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 the public can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
physically
 and mentally and employ them to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 up for a lack of workforce.

Rich You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 should accept more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforeigneralienexileexpatriatedisplaced personemigrant
refugees
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 their health and mental illness. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 who are persecuted
 and fled to another You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 are more likely to suffer from health problems This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of inadequate food resources and become Possible spelling mistake found.malnutrition
malnutritional
. Furthermore
, they tend to have lower This word is normally spelled with hyphen.self-esteem
self esteem
 and are depressed
 as they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 they do not have bright future in their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 owing to violence and war. For example
, Japan Times reported that figures of BMI of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforeigneralienexileexpatriatedisplaced personemigrant
refugees
 were lower than the average of civilians living in Japan and the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 escaped from their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 were The usual preposition with "anxious" is "about" or "for". Did you mean "anxious about" or "anxious for"?anxious aboutanxious for
anxious of
 their futures.

Another reason why rich nations should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforeigneralienexileexpatriatedisplaced personemigrant
refugees
 to enter their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 firms that are short of employees can fill in with them. The less staff a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 has, the more difficult it will be to run their business efficiently
, however
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 who This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 landed on a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 would seek for jobs to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a living. It is more cost effective for an Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.organization
organisation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they do not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 hire them with high wage. For instance
, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to work in a shipping This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 the tendency that a majority of foreign You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 had night shifts as their wedge were higher than that of day shifts and the employees entrusted them easy duties with not higher wedge compared to Japanese workers This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they could not speak Japanese.

In conclusion
, it could be preferable for developed You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 to sanction You use this word too often, consider replacing it withforeigneralienexileexpatriatedisplaced personemigrant
refugees
 to cross the boarders by serving the essentials to them This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 citizens can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 out those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people’s
 health and mental, and allocate work to them to operate their business efficiently
. 