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We should pay attention to the opinions of famous people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

We should pay attention to the opinions of famous people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
It is undeniable that famous people have significant role in our society. We hear news about their life and activities in the society. Some people agree that we should pay attention to the opinions of famous people, whistle others disagree. I agree with the statement and these are my justifications. To begin with, the opinions of famous people are crucial for many individuals. As an evidence of this, mostly younger people look at the life and activities of famous people. They take them as inspiring people in their life and eager to accomplish the activities as their role model. For instance, if a young person is sporty then popular player such as Christiano Ronaldo, Neymar Junior can be inspiring. Consequently, they seek to play effectively by applying tricks and ideas of their favourite players. In addition to that, if people watch the character of famous people helping in the progress of the society. Ultimately, individuals will be inspired from them and fascinates to involve in the development programmes of the community. In conclusion, I completely agree with this statement. I think popular people have utmost role in the progress of the society and they can be inspired people for the individuals living in the world.
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have significant role in our
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society
. We hear news about their life and activities in the
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society
.
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Some
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people
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agree
that we should pay attention to the opinions of
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famous
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people
, whistle others disagree. I
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agree
with the statement and these are my justifications.

To
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begin
with, the opinions of
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famous
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people
are crucial for
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many
individuals. As an evidence of this,
mostly
younger
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people
look at the life and activities of
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famous
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people
. They take them as inspiring
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people
in their life and eager to accomplish the activities as their role model.
For instance
, if a young person is sporty then popular player such as
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Christiano
Ronaldo,
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Neymar
Junior can be inspiring.
Consequently
, they seek to play
effectively
by applying tricks and
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ideas
of their
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favourite
players.

In addition
to that, if
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people
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watch
the character of
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famous
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people
helping in the progress of the
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society
.
Ultimately
, individuals will
be inspired
from them and fascinates to involve in the development
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programmes
of the community.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
with this statement. I
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think
popular
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people
have utmost role in the progress of the
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society and
they can
be inspired
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people
for the individuals living in the world.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay We should pay attention to the opinions of famous people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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