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We regret to inform you that the university will no longer be able to offer complementary transportation by bus between various stops on campus and in the city at large. Instead, all students will now be given a fifty-dollar pass for public transportation v.1

We regret to inform you that the university will no longer be able to offer complementary transportation by bus between various stops on campus and in the city at large. Instead, all students will now be given a fifty-dollar pass for public transportation v. 1
Many believed artificially intelligent robots will soon take over most jobs from human beings. While the robots’ ability might fit well for most repetitive jobs, it is difficult to replace jobs that require human creativity with the A. I. This essay will discuss why our creativity at work is difficult for AI to imitate in certain occupations. For duties requiring a same standard, the artificial robots might be better candidates than the humans. Robots can be programmed to execute repetitive motions which make them a perfect task force of production to meet strict quality controls. For instance, in Japanese catering industry, most procedures in fast food production are operated by the machines, thus the taste and outlook of each frozen meals are all identical. Therefore, it is foreseeable that many of the similar tasks could be delivered by robots instead. In contrast, jobs that involve human creation might be difficult for machines to perform. Human’s ability in perceiving and expressing news ideas are unique; it cannot be duplicated by programming. Great authors touched hearts of millions by observing the humanity and deliver in a story; artists communicate with their audience by paintings or sculptures and the emotion resonates with our hearts. Even if we programme robots with the most versatile vocabularies or the best art-crafting techniques, robots could not produce masterpieces like “Crime and Punishment” or “Starry Night”. That is the reason why in some aspects machines could never win over human beings. To conclude, robots are expected to become dominant in jobs in specific areas. Robots are highly qualified for repetitive labouring; whereas jobs that require imagination might not be at robots’ expertise. Ultimately, few occupations might still be safe from robots’ seizure comparing to the major robot employment in the future.
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Many
believed
artificially
intelligent robots will
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soon
take over most
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jobs
from
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human
beings. While the robots’ ability
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might
fit well for most repetitive
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jobs
, it is difficult to replace
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jobs
that require
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human
creativity with the A. I. This essay will discuss why our creativity at work is difficult for AI to imitate in certain occupations.

For duties requiring a same standard, the artificial robots
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might
be better candidates than the
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humans
. Robots can
be programmed
to execute repetitive motions which
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make
them a perfect task force of production to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
strict quality controls.
For instance
, in Japanese catering industry, most procedures in
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fast
food production
are operated
by the machines,
thus
the taste and outlook of each frozen meals are all identical.
Therefore
, it is foreseeable that
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many
of the similar tasks could
be delivered
by robots
instead
.

In contrast
,
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jobs
that involve
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human
creation
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might
be difficult for machines to perform.
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Human’s
ability in perceiving and expressing news
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ideas
are unique; it cannot
be duplicated
by programming. Great authors touched hearts of millions by observing the humanity and deliver in a story; artists communicate with their audience by paintings or sculptures and the emotion resonates with our hearts. Even if we
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programme
robots with the most versatile vocabularies or the best art-crafting techniques, robots could not produce masterpieces like “Crime and Punishment” or “Starry Night”.
That is
the reason why in
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some
aspects machines could never win over
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human
beings.

To conclude
, robots are
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expected
to become dominant in
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jobs
in specific areas. Robots are
highly
qualified for repetitive
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labouring
; whereas
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jobs
that require imagination
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might
not be at robots’ expertise.
Ultimately
, few occupations
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might
still
be safe from robots’ seizure comparing to the major robot employment in the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay We regret to inform you that the university will no longer be able to offer complementary transportation by bus between various stops on campus and in the city at large. Instead, all students will now be given a fifty-dollar pass for public transportation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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