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We have often thought of creating am ideal society but most of the times we have failed in this happen what is your opinion about an ideal society v.2

We have often thought of creating am ideal society but most of the times we have failed in this happen what is your opinion about an ideal society v. 2
It is certainly true that we are living in materialistic world. Everyone wants to create an ideal society. However, many times we thought to making well society, but we have failrd. In my opinion, an ideal society is the sign of neighborhood. I will discuss both about ideal society and how we can make it. An ideal society is the combination of several things. first is an ideal people le, if a society has an ideal people and neighborhood between people. That' s is the well society. next, if a society has better amenities such as better water system, good hospitals, transport and too education, then it is symbol of well society. Also, if members of society has well educated and conscious about their health. There are ample steps with the help of this we can create a well society. To begin with, for creating an ideal society prior we should be conscious about education we should teach. our children up to tertiary level, because today' s children are the citizen of future society. Take an example of prime minister of India started a campaign of pmky. it helps of poor family to get better education. Next, everyone gives charity to the society, which will be fruitful for society, them we should not spoil the ambience of society and help to create an ideal society. To conclude, I strongly recommend that we should create an ideal society, because in that society in which we are living, it is lke of home for us, so we ought to maintain society.
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ideal
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is the
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sign
of neighborhood. I will discuss both about
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ideal
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society
and how we can
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is the combination of several things.
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first
is an
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people
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, if a
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has an
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and neighborhood between
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.
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well
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, if a
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has better amenities such as better water system,
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good
hospitals, transport and too education, then it is symbol of
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well
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society
.
Also
, if members of
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has
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well educated
and conscious about their health.

There are ample steps with the
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of this we can
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a
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. To
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with, for creating an
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ideal
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prior we should be conscious about education we should teach.
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our
children up to tertiary level,
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#039; s children are the citizen of future
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. Take an example of prime minister of India
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a campaign of
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pmky
.
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it
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helps
of poor family to
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get
better education.
Next
, everyone gives charity to the
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society
, which will be fruitful for
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society
, them we should not spoil the ambience of
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society
and
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help
to
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create
an
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ideal
society.

To conclude
, I
strongly
recommend that we should
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create
an
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ideal
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,
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in that
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in which we are living, it is
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lke
of home for us,
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we ought to maintain
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS essay We have often thought of creating am ideal society but most of the times we have failed in this happen what is your opinion about an ideal society v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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