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It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v. 5
Friends are an important part of life, whenever one is in any hardship friends are always there to provide support. And this is the reason I believe friendship shouldn’t fade. And old friends have a special role in everyone’s life, I have strong reasons for believing this. First, everyone has cherished moments of life spent with old friends. Especially for me, whenever I meet my childhood friends they bring back old memories that always leaves smiles on our faces. But if one doesn' t have old friends to talk to, then it won' t be much fun to remember those moments, as when shared with someone who was present then. Another reason is that, older the friendship is the more understanding develops, For example I have many new friends in college, but whenever I am in doubt or have major decisions to make, I always ring one of my school friends. The reason is that old friends would know and understand me better. Although, this doesn' t mean one should not make new friends. Because in today’s world knowing more people and having more connections really matters. But one shouldn’t forget his or her old friends, even a occasional call on birthdays would keep the friendship alive and healthy. Ultimately, all the success in life would make one happier, when shared and celebrated with longtime friends. After all its really hard to find true friends and friendship that lasts, so its more important to keep old friends closer and new friends close.
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are an
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part of
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life
, whenever one is in any hardship
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friends
are always there to provide support. And this is the
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reason
I believe
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friendship
shouldn’t fade. And
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old
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friends
have a special role in everyone’s
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life
, I have strong
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reasons
for believing this.

First
, everyone has cherished moments of
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life
spent with
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old
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friends
.
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for me, whenever I
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meet
my childhood
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friends
they bring back
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old
memories that always
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leaves
smiles on our faces.
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But
if one
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old
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Another
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reason
is that, older the
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is the more understanding develops,
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friends
in college,
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whenever I am in doubt or have major decisions to
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, I always ring one of my school
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friends
. The
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reason
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old
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friends
would know and understand me better.

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friends
.
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in
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today
’s world knowing more
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people
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really
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one shouldn’t forget
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his or her
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old
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friends
, even
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occasional call on birthdays would
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keep
the
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friendship
alive and healthy.

Ultimately
, all the success in
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life
would
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make
one happier, when shared and celebrated with longtime
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friends
.
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really
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friends
and
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friendship
that lasts,
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so
its more
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important
to
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old
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friends
closer and new
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friends
close.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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