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We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. v.2

We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. v. 2
In the past, nuclear technology was instrumental in defining the military power of a nation. It revolutionised the way wars are fought now. Nowadays, governments are doing more R& D, how to use this technology in a controlled environment to benefit power, medical, commercial and industrial sectors. This essay will analyse the merits and demerits of using nuclear technology for civilian usage. Nuclear power plants can be made using this technology which will provide a cheap source of power for developing countries where energy crisis are rising ever year. For instance, Iran is using its nuclear power plants to generate electricity. However, if safety procedures are not followed strictly in operating these power plants, it can result in leaking of radiation in the environment which can have adverse effects on the mankind and ecosystem of the region. Power plants in Russia is an example, where radiation leakage happened due to the mishandling and that caused the death of many power plant workers. Medical sciences and medical equipment are another domain where nuclear technology can be used to cure patients. For instance, Cancer, which was widely believed to be non-curable disease, can now be cured to some extent by exposing the patient to radiations on a regular basis. Again, this procedure of curing is painful and does not work all the time. Another benefit which nuclear technology can provide is in oil and gas exploration. Nuclear well logging is used t help predict the commercial viability of new or existing wells. It is also used in food processing where food is treated with ionising radiation. This food treatment if not handled with care can contaminate the food with radiation and it would be disastrous if the food reaches the market unchecked. To conclude, the above provides advantages and disadvantages associated with using nuclear technology for the civilian purpose. In my opinion, even if the nuclear technology is used in a strictly controlled environment with proper safety measures, it still posses' threat to mankind and ecosystem of our planet. We should expand our research and look into other technologies that can be an alternative to nuclear technology and is environmental friendly.
In the past, nuclear
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technology
was instrumental in defining the military
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power
of a nation. It
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revolutionised
the way wars
are fought
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now
. Nowadays,
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governments
are doing more
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R&
D, how to
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use
this
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technology
in a controlled environment to benefit
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power
, medical, commercial and industrial sectors. This essay will
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analyse
the merits and demerits of using nuclear
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technology
for civilian usage.

Nuclear
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power
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plants
can
be made
using this
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technology
which will provide a
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cheap
source of
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power
for
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developing countries
where energy crisis are rising
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ever
year.
For instance
, Iran is using its nuclear
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power
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plants
to generate electricity.
However
, if safety procedures are not followed
strictly
in operating these
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power
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plants
, it can result in leaking of
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radiation
in the environment which can have adverse effects on the mankind and ecosystem of the region.
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Power
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plants
in Russia is an example, where
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radiation
leakage happened due to the mishandling and that caused the death of
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many
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power
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plant
workers.

Medical sciences and medical equipment are another domain where nuclear
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technology
can be
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used
to cure patients.
For instance
, Cancer, which was
widely
believed to be non-curable disease, can
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now
be cured
to
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some
extent by exposing the patient to
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radiations
on a regular basis. Again, this procedure of curing is painful and does not work all the time.

Another benefit which nuclear
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technology
can provide is in oil and gas exploration. Nuclear well logging is
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used
t
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help
predict the commercial viability of new or existing wells. It is
also
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used
in
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food
processing where
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food
is treated
with
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ionising
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radiation
. This
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food
treatment if not handled with care can contaminate the
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food
with
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radiation
and it would be disastrous if the
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food
reaches the market unchecked.

To conclude
, the above provides advantages and disadvantages associated with using nuclear
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technology
for the civilian purpose. In my opinion, even if the nuclear
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technology
is
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used
in a
strictly
controlled environment with proper safety measures, it
still
posses' threat to mankind and ecosystem of our planet. We should expand our research and look into other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technologies
that can be an alternative to nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
and is environmental friendly.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
359 words
6.0
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