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We are seeing a significant increase in online shopping nowadays. What are the advantages of this trend? v.1

We are seeing a significant increase in online shopping nowadays. What are the advantages of this trend? v. 1
With the technological advancement and widespread use of computers, smartphones and other hand-held computer devices, people are doing online shopping nowadays more than ever. More store owners are going online with their products and because of the convenient shopping mechanism, customers are opting to this new trends. The advantage of this online shopping facility is huge and there are some drawbacks as well. To mention the advantages, we have to consider the conveniences of both merchant and shoppers. Merchants can run their shops 24/7 and without any utility bill to be paid, employee salary is not required and they can reach to a whole new segment of customers. Online shopping sites like e-bay & Amazon have more than several millions of online customers and these two websites can be two great examples of online business potentials. The merchants can reach to the new and potential shoppers with their online offerings beside their physical stores. This is indeed a great prospect for the business owners to expand the business. In fact, going online is no longer an option it has become a must in today’s world. From the customers’ point of view, online shopping saves their time and money. They no longer have to go to the shops, accept the hassle and spend more to purchase their necessary products. Nowadays all they have to do is visit online shops from their computers or phones compare products and pay online. That’s it! And the quick delivery system would ensure the delivery of the ordered products to the shopper’s doorstep. This is a comprehensive lifestyle improvement for the online shoppers. They can spend more time at home with family members than spending time in marketplaces. They do not need to carry cash and that’s a better safety in terms of payment towards the purchases. Among the disadvantages, the first and foremost is the inability of touching and feeling the product before purchasing. An online shopper cannot touch the product and judge the quality of it before making the final decision or purchasing. They have to rely on the images and description of the products and that might often lead to dissatisfactions of the customers. The second threatening issue is the online theft and credit card information hacking that might become an alarming issue soon. A potential hacker and the malicious computer software worms can steal the sensitive information of an online customer and cause numerous troubles to the card owners. From the merchants’ point of view, customers often disagree to pay in case of pay-on-delivery payment option and this is very negative for running a smooth business. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and with time the online shopping would be the primary mode of shopping for us.
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of computers, smartphones and other hand-held computer devices,
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people
are doing
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online
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nowadays more than ever. More store owners are going
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with their
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products
and
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because
of the convenient
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mechanism,
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customers
are opting to this new trends. The advantage of this
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online
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shopping
facility is huge and there are
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some
drawbacks
as well
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To mention the advantages, we
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have to
consider the conveniences of both
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merchant
and
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shoppers
.
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Merchants
can run their shops 24/7 and without any utility bill to
be paid
, employee salary is not
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required and
they can reach to a whole new segment of
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customers
.
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Online
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shopping
sites like e-bay & Amazon have more than several millions of
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online
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customers
and these two websites can be two great examples of
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online
business potentials. The
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merchants
can reach to the new and potential
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shoppers
with their
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online
offerings beside their physical stores. This is
indeed
a great prospect for the business owners to expand the business. In fact, going
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online
is no longer an option it has become a
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must
in
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today
’s world.

From the
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customers’
point of view,
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online
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shopping
saves their
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time
and money. They no longer
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have to
go to the shops, accept the hassle and spend more to
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purchase
their necessary
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products
. Nowadays all they
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have to
do is visit
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online
shops from their computers or phones compare
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products
and pay
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online
. That’s it! And the quick delivery system would ensure the delivery of the ordered
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products
to the
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shopper’s
doorstep. This is a comprehensive lifestyle improvement for the
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online
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shoppers
. They can spend more
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time
at home with family members than spending
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time
in marketplaces. They do not need to carry cash and that’s a better safety in terms of payment towards the
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purchases
.

Among the disadvantages, the
first
and foremost is the inability of touching and feeling the
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product
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before
purchasing. An
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online
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shopper
cannot touch the
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product
and judge the quality of it
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before
making the final decision or purchasing. They
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have to
rely on the images and description of the
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products
and that might
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often
lead to
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dissatisfactions
of the
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customers
. The second threatening issue is the
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online
theft and credit card information hacking that might become an alarming issue
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soon
.

A potential hacker and the malicious computer software worms can steal the sensitive information of an
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online
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customer
and cause numerous troubles to the card owners. From the
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merchants’
point of view,
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customers
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often
disagree to pay in case of pay-on-delivery payment option and this is
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very
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negative
for running a smooth business.

In conclusion
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and with
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time
the
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online
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shopping
would be the primary mode of
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shopping
for us.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay We are seeing a significant increase in online shopping nowadays. What are the advantages of this trend? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
456 words
5.5
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