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Waste disposal problems are increasing especially in urban areas. Suggest what government and individuals should do to help reduce the amount of rubbish production and disposal of it. v.1

Waste disposal problems are increasing especially in urban areas. Suggest what government and individuals should do to help reduce the amount of rubbish production and disposal of it. v. 1
Due to the rapid industrialisation throughout the 21st century, a lot of people have migrated to cities seeking for a better life. The drastic increase in the urban population engenders a series of issues. Waste management is one of the key problems faced by almost all cities across the globe. Both the governments and citizens have to take effective steps to minimise the trash produced every day in these cities. Firstly, governments of all countries need to relocate the industries which leave behind a myriad of byproducts to the countryside, either by limiting the license in cities or by providing subsidies. In addition to that, public waste management committee has to be in place, which would regularly check how the thrash is managed by the industries. For example, a few states in India are encouraging industries to set up their plant in remote areas by providing free land. Thus a major problem of waste management can be resolved. Secondly, the government has to ensure that efficient waste disposal mechanism is connected to every household. Each house needs to have an easy access to litter bins and they must be cleaned by the public body 3 to 4 times every day. Moreover, if any citizen violates this law by throwing the garbage in the public area, he or she should be penalised heavily. In the case of Singapore, every apartment has waste disposal area and which is cleaned thrice a day by the government. This mechanism makes the management of rubbish organised. Citizens should understand that they will ultimately face the problems if the garbage is not properly taken care of. They should take some responsibility to keep their living place and neighbourhood clean. In some cases, they should take the wastage to the waste disposal centre for recycling. Again, recycling and reusing products could be an effective way to tackle this issue. The country like Japan has been very successful in recycling and reusing the products and that had helped them to reduce the problem they had with the excessive wastage their citizens produce.   Recyclable products should be promoted so that rubbish creation can be minimised. Special concessions have to be given in supermarkets to promote customers to bring their own environment-friendly bags instead of polythene ones. This can be achieved by promoting the awareness sessions in the social media websites like Facebook and government advertisements in televisions. Usage of recyclable ensures that waste can be minimised. In conclusion, the entire community has to take a lot of steps in tackling the waste management. Once the thrash is organised well, the human life expectancy is predicted to go up as we support a greener environment.
Due to the rapid
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industrialisation
throughout the 21st century,
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a lot of
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people
have migrated to cities seeking for a better life. The drastic increase in the urban population engenders a series of issues.
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Waste
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management
is one of the key
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problems
faced by almost all cities across the globe. Both the
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governments
and citizens
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have to
take effective steps to
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minimise
the trash produced every day in these cities.

Firstly
,
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governments
of all countries need to relocate the industries which
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leave
behind a myriad of byproducts to the countryside, either by limiting the license in cities or by providing subsidies.
In addition
to that, public
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waste
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management
committee
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has to
be in place, which would
regularly
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check
how the thrash
is managed
by the industries.
For example
, a few states in India are encouraging industries to set up their plant in remote areas by providing free land.
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Thus
a major
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problem
of
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waste
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management
can
be resolved
.

Secondly
, the
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government
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has to
ensure that efficient
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waste
disposal mechanism
is connected
to every household. Each
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house
needs to have
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an easy access
to litter
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bins and
they
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must
be cleaned
by the public body 3 to 4 times every day.
Moreover
, if any citizen violates this law by throwing the garbage in the public area, he or she should be
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penalised
heavily
. In the case of Singapore, every apartment has
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waste
disposal area and which
is cleaned
thrice a day by the
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government
. This mechanism
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makes
the
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management
of rubbish
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organised
.

Citizens should understand that they will
ultimately
face the
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problems
if the garbage is not
properly
taken care of. They should take
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some
responsibility to
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keep
their living place and
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neighbourhood
clean. In
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some
cases, they should take the wastage to the
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waste
disposal
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centre
for recycling. Again, recycling and reusing products could be an effective way to tackle this issue. The country like Japan has been
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very
successful in recycling and reusing the products and that had
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helped
them to
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reduce
the
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problem
they had with the excessive wastage their citizens produce.
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Recyclable products should
be promoted
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so
that rubbish creation can be
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minimised
. Special concessions
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have to
be
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given
in supermarkets to promote customers to bring their
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own
environment-friendly bags
instead
of polythene ones. This can
be achieved
by promoting the awareness sessions in the social media websites like Facebook and
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government
advertisements in televisions. Usage of recyclable ensures that
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waste
can be
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minimised
.

In conclusion
, the entire community
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has to
take
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a lot of
steps in tackling the
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waste
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management
. Once the thrash is
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organised
well, the human life expectancy
is predicted
to go up as we support a greener environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Waste disposal problems are increasing especially in urban areas. Suggest what government and individuals should do to help reduce the amount of rubbish production and disposal of it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
446 words
6.0
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