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Vehicle free day means the private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in citycentres. Only the bus, bicycles and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do youthink the benefits outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

Vehicle free day means the private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in citycentres. Only the bus, bicycles and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do youthink the benefits outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
That residents in the city centre should use public transports instead of having personal vehicles has controversial. This essay will discuss about both the pros and cons of opinion that only bus, bicycles and taxis have permissions to move in the center of the city. To begin with, there are some advantages of this solution. First and foremost, prohibiting private vehicles leads to less congestion. For instance, more public transports are used, less vehicles go in the street. This makes road avoid crowded and people who are in road feel more comfortable. Secondly, fewer vehicles on the street means less exhaust emissions, thus less air pollution. The emissions does not only increase global warming but also be harmful for health of people. Moreover, this method saves money for country since the government does not need to spend more money on building parking lots and widening the roads. On the other hand, using only bus, bicycles and taxis has some negative affections. Firstly, the limited public transports can not meet the enough demand of the huge number of people in the city. For example, a bus has fewer seats so people who get on bus after other people ma be stand during the trip. This makes passengers tired and uncomfortable. In addition, the habitants who choose the public vehicles can must depend on the bus' s schedule and they can even can not stop anywhere they want. Sometimes they can miss the the important works because of that while people who drive themselves can go anytime and anywhere they want. In conclusion, although there are some disadvantages of using public transports such as bus or taxis and bicycles, I strongly believe that the benefits of it outweigh the negative affections and it is a good solution for city with congestion.
That residents in the city
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centre
should
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use
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public
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transports
instead
of having personal
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vehicles
has controversial. This essay will
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discuss about both
the pros and cons of opinion that
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only
bus, bicycles and taxis have permissions to
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move
in the center of the city.

To
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begin
with, there are
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some
advantages of this solution.
First
and foremost, prohibiting private
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vehicles
leads to
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less
congestion.
For instance
, more
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public
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transports
are
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used
,
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less
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vehicles
go in the street. This
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makes
road avoid crowded and
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people
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who
are in road feel more comfortable.
Secondly
, fewer
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vehicles
on the street means
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less
exhaust emissions,
thus
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less
air pollution. The emissions
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does
not
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only
increase global warming
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but
also
be harmful for health of
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people
.
Moreover
, this method saves money for country since the
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government
does not need to spend more money on building parking lots and widening the roads.

On the other hand
, using
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only
bus, bicycles and taxis has
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some
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negative
affections.
Firstly
, the limited
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public
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transports
can not
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meet
the
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enough
demand of the huge number of
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people
in the city.
For example
, a bus has fewer seats
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so
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people
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who
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get
on bus after other
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people
ma be
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stand
during the trip. This
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makes
passengers tired and uncomfortable.
In addition
, the habitants
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who
choose the
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public
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vehicles
can
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must
depend on the
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schedule and
they can even can not
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stop
anywhere they want.
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Sometimes
they can miss
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the the
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important
works
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because
of that while
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people
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who
drive themselves can go anytime and anywhere they want.

In conclusion
, although there are
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some
disadvantages of using
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public
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transports
such as bus or taxis and bicycles, I
strongly
believe that the benefits of it outweigh the
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negative
affections and it is a
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good
solution for city with congestion.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Vehicle free day means the private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in citycentres. Only the bus, bicycles and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do youthink the benefits outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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