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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past. v.510

Students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past. v. 510
Throughout history, a teacher has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, people have always searched for ways to enhance teachers position in societies. Whether or not pupils honour their teachers as the same as the previous generation, is controversial. I contend that the new generation tries to respect to their teacher as much as they can. Hence, I disagree with this proposal. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons. The first important factor to be mentioned is that students have a strong bond with their teachers, and they are as the same as their friends. To elaborate on my point, teachers try to make a suitable and friendly relationship with their students. So, students also try to improve their relationship with their teachers by enhancing respect and studying well. But, in the past, teachers were punished their students, and they did not try to make a friendly relationship with their pupils. Therefore, students felt feer about teachers so that they had to respect their teachers. However, the new generation, try to show their merits sense to their teachers and improve their position. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a middle school student, both of one of my friends' parents worked. However, they were rich family, but I recall that he did not respect our teacher, he did not finish his assignment and he did not treat well in class. He was the only rude guy in our class. In the middle of my academic term, I realized that he was the only guy who’s parents both worked. Consequently, they were not at home to teach him to be polite in school ant respect his teacher. Another reason which deserves some words here is that parents try to learn their children how to respect other people. To shed more light on this matter, fathers and mothers spend much time growing their children as well as they can. They want children to learn how to respect other people, especially to their teachers and professors. But, in the previous, parents did not consume enough time to grow their children, because they had a lot of duties and they had to do them. In this situation, children did not know how to respect their teachers. They respected their teachers base on feer not knowledge. All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that new generation tries to more respect to their teachers than the previous generation. I believe that new students not only have friends with their teachers but also have better-growing condition. Therefore, they learn how to improve respect to their teachers.
Throughout history, a
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teacher
has played a prominent role in all societies.
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Because
it is of paramount importance,
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people
have always searched for ways to enhance
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teachers
position in societies.
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Whether or not
pupils
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honour
their
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teachers
as the same as the previous generation, is controversial. I contend that the
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new
generation tries to
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respect
to their
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teacher
as much as they can.
Hence
, I disagree with this proposal. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.

The
first
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important
factor to
be mentioned
is that
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students
have a strong bond with their
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teachers
, and they are as the same as their friends. To elaborate on my point,
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teachers
try to
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make
a suitable and friendly relationship with their
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students
.
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So
,
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students
also
try to
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improve
their relationship with their
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teachers
by enhancing
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respect
and studying well.
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But
, in the past,
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teachers
were punished
their
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students
, and they did not try to
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make
a friendly relationship with their pupils.
Therefore
,
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students
felt
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feer
about
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teachers
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so
that they had to
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respect
their
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teachers
.
However
, the
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new
generation, try to
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show
their merits sense to their
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teachers
and
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improve
their position. My
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own
experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a middle school
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student
, both of one of my
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friends&
#039;
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parents
worked.
However
, they were rich family,
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but
I recall that he did not
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respect
our
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teacher
, he did not finish his
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assignment and
he did not treat well in
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class
. He was the
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only
rude guy in our
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class
. In the middle of my academic term, I realized that he was the
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only
guy
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who’s
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parents
both worked.
Consequently
, they were not at home to teach him to be polite in school ant
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respect
his teacher.

Another reason which deserves
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some
words here is that
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parents
try to learn their
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children
how to
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respect
other
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people
. To shed more light on this matter, fathers and mothers spend much time growing their
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children
as well
as they can. They want
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children
to learn how to
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respect
other
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people
,
especially
to their
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teachers
and professors.
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But
, in the previous,
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parents
did not consume
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enough
time to grow their
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children
,
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because
they had
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a lot of
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duties and
they had to do them. In this situation,
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children
did not know how to
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respect
their
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teachers
. They respected their
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teachers
base on
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feer
not knowledge.

All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that
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new
generation tries to more
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respect
to their
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teachers
than the previous generation. I believe that
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new
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students
not
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only
have friends with their
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teachers
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but
also
have better-growing condition.
Therefore
, they learn how to
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improve
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respect
to their
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teachers
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past. v. 510

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
451 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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