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Vehicle free day means the private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in citycentres. Only the bus, bicycles and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do youthink the benefits outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Vehicle free day means the private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in citycentres. Only the bus, bicycles and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do youthink the benefits outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Nowadays, athletes in all kinds of sports are able to earn much more money than they used to in the past while some changes, according to a great number of people, in rewarding for those who have made important contributions to many other fields have not seen a big difference compared to the old times. Some think that it is totally normal and acceptable, however, there are some opposite thoughts. This issue will be discussed now. In the first place, it is understandable that professional athletes usually receive higher salaries than other jobs. Firstly, sports is considered to be a serious profession that makes billions of dollars for the sporting industry each year. That explains why athletes must train hard in order to win a place in a professional sporting team or obtain a ticket to compete in a global sporting event. In other words, they have to pay for that price with sweat, blood and tear, sacrificing their own privacy and time to sharpen their skills to be able to perform well in front of the eyes of audiences. Additionally, each sporting event attracts the huge attention of people from all over the world, who watch either from stadiums or through the TV and computer screens at home to support for their favourite players or national teams. This contributes to the high salaries given to professional players as a compensation for their loss and sacrifice to bring honour and fame for themselves as well as for their teams, fans and countries. On the other hand, some people believe that other crucial professions like doctor, lawyer, or dangerous occupations such as mining worker or electrician need to be well-paid too, because they are making the world become a safer and better place to live. To be more exact, their salaries are relatively low compared the those of athletes while they have to spend their precious time learning, enhancing their knowledge and skills as well. Therefore, it seems to be unfair if they do not get the salary as high as professional players. In conclusion, paying unreasonably high incomes to athletes is not necessary and somehow wasteful. We need to consider rewarding more for the meaningful and critical contributions of the other professions. By that, it seems more impartial and it will also be a motivation for individuals to keep going on the track that they have chosen to make the world a better place.
Nowadays,
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athletes
in all kinds of sports are able to earn much more money than they
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used
to in the past while
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some
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changes
, according to a great number of
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people
, in rewarding for those who have made
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important
contributions to
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many
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other
fields have not
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seen
a
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big
difference compared to the
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old
times.
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think
that it is
totally
normal and acceptable,
however
, there are
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some
opposite thoughts. This issue will
be discussed
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now
.

In the
first
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place
, it is understandable that
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professional
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athletes
usually
receive higher
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salaries
than
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other
jobs.
Firstly
, sports
is considered
to be a serious profession that
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makes
billions of dollars for the sporting industry each year. That
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explains
why
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athletes
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must
train
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hard
in order to win a
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place
in a
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professional
sporting team or obtain a ticket to compete in a global sporting
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event
. In
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other
words, they
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have to
pay for that price with sweat, blood and tear, sacrificing their
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own
privacy and time to sharpen their
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skills
to be able to perform well in front of the eyes of audiences.
Additionally
, each sporting
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event
attracts the huge attention of
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people
from all over the world, who
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watch
either from stadiums or through the TV and computer screens at home to support for their
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favourite
players or national teams. This contributes to the high
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salaries
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given
to
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professional
players as a compensation for their loss and sacrifice to bring
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honour
and fame for themselves
as well
as for their teams, fans and countries.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
believe that
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other
crucial professions like doctor, lawyer, or
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dangerous
occupations such as mining worker or electrician need to be well-paid too,
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because
they are making the world become a safer and better
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place
to
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live
. To be more exact, their
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salaries
are
relatively
low compared the those of
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athletes
while they
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have to
spend their precious time learning, enhancing their knowledge and
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skills
as well
.
Therefore
, it seems to be unfair if they do not
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get
the
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salary
as high as
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professional
players.

In conclusion
, paying
unreasonably
high incomes to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
is not necessary and somehow wasteful. We need to consider rewarding more for the meaningful and critical contributions of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
professions. By that, it seems more impartial and it will
also
be a motivation for individuals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
going on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
that they have chosen to
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make
the world a better
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place
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Vehicle free day means the private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in citycentres. Only the bus, bicycles and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do youthink the benefits outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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