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Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they respond to the specific points made in the reading passage Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Thou v.1

Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they respond to the specific points made in the reading passage Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Thou v. 1
International aids take a crucial role in the keys of friendship amongst the countries. However, these funds recently just vanish and many lives have to suffer from it, from both the giver and receiver countries, that people suggest that the government should not send the money. In my opinion, I would like to stay in the middle ground of this debate. On the one hand, international aids help the citizens of poor countries have more space to raise their living conditions and qualities. Unemployment, poverty and illiteracy happen in these nations, and the government cannot handle on their own. Researches show that developing countries have a big hole in their budget of loans from bigger countries, and many cannot afford the bill, which they have to give away their lands like Sri Lanka. Therefore, these aids can be really useful, as the government can allocate resources to tackle the issue. However, this may only work if the country can clamp down on tax havens and force our international companies to abide by social, environmental and accounting norms. On the other hand, some argue that aid is generous is absurd, and that is true in some countries, especially in low-economic ones. Inflations and wrong-purposed motivations have thrived amongst the governors, which affects dramatically on the people. Furthermore, arms trades, like in are pushed and the lives of the dwellers put in danger, too. While the funds must be reserved for the development and maintenance of its institution and social security measures, they are considered to be over-generous, so it is not a suggestion to bring money without hesitation. In conclusion, aids bring benefits for the friendship between countries. But the giving cash with no controlling may not bring good results; therefore, it has to be carefully checked or should not give, if necessary.
International
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aids
take a crucial role in the keys of friendship amongst the
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countries
.
However
, these funds recently
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just
vanish and
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many
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lives
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have to
suffer from it, from both the giver and receiver
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countries
, that
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people
suggest that the
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government
should not
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send
the money. In my opinion, I would like to stay in the middle ground of this debate.

On the one hand, international
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aids
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help
the citizens of poor
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countries
have more space to raise their living conditions and qualities. Unemployment, poverty and illiteracy happen in these nations, and the
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government
cannot handle on their
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own
. Researches
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show
that developing
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countries
have a
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big
hole in their budget of loans from bigger
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countries
, and
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many
cannot afford the bill, which they
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have to
give away their lands like Sri Lanka.
Therefore
, these
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aids
can be
really
useful, as the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can allocate resources to tackle the issue.
However
, this may
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only
work if the
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country
can clamp down on tax havens and force our international
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to abide by social, environmental and accounting norms.

On the other hand
,
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some
argue that
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aid
is generous is absurd, and
that is
true in
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some
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countries
,
especially
in low-economic ones.
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Inflations
and
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wrong
-purposed motivations have thrived amongst the governors, which affects
dramatically
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Furthermore
, arms trades, like in
are pushed
and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of the dwellers put in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
, too. While the funds
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be reserved
for the development and maintenance of its institution and social security measures, they
are considered
to be over-generous,
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so
it is not a suggestion to bring money without hesitation.

In conclusion
,
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aids
bring benefits for the friendship between
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countries
.
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But
the giving cash with no controlling may not bring
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
results;
therefore
, it
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has to
be
carefully
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
or should not give, if necessary.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they respond to the specific points made in the reading passage Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Thou v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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