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If you had a choice between going to a movie theater to watch a movie or watching that same movie at home on a large television, which would you choose? v.1

If you had a choice between going to a movie theater to watch a movie or watching that same movie at home on a large television, which would you choose? v. 1
We live in a democratic world, it is our right to speak, read and write. Speaking on the general topic is everyone’s choice but do we consider it correct? I considerably agree with this statement, every individual has his rights and limits. Firstly, our government gives us the chance to talk about anything and also pass statements about any general topic. What I mean is, some known faces from different industries give their views about a topic such as politics, health, education. Sometimes their statement’s could be taken very seriously whereas it doesn’t have any basics attached to it. For instance, Twitter, a social networking site is used frequently by actors, politicians, businessmen and the general public and everyone is free to give their opinions. Justifying democratic environment. Secondly, Who is to set limits? Social media has bought us all together in a single platform where transparency plays the vital role, however, this stage allows everyone to portray their thoughts, but no base to justify and many a times they get into ugly fights and troubles without any reason. To take an example, a word war was on between a politician and a cinema actor about the issues of education in the capital of India where the actor posted a statement saying there is no progress in the education industry in New Delhi, whereas, the politician had the actual facts about the progress taking place in that section of the society. So setting limits would be a great gesture for all to stop portraying biased views. In conclusion, democratic independence gives us the right to speak, but what to speak and to what extent is in the hands of an individual. Using it wisely is advised.
We
live
in a democratic world, it is our right to speak, read and write. Speaking on the general topic is everyone’s choice
but
do we consider it correct? I
considerably
agree
with this
statement
, every individual has his rights and limits.

Firstly
, our
government
gives
us the chance to talk about anything and
also
pass
statements
about any general topic. What I mean is,
some
known faces from
different
industries
give
their views about a topic such as politics, health, education.
Sometimes
their
statement’s
could
be taken
very
seriously
whereas it doesn’t have any basics attached to it.
For instance
, Twitter, a social networking site is
used
frequently
by actors, politicians, businessmen and the
general public
and everyone is free to
give
their opinions. Justifying democratic environment.

Secondly
, Who is to set limits? Social media has
bought
us all together in a single platform where transparency plays the vital role,
however
, this stage
allows
everyone to portray their thoughts,
but
no base to justify and
many
a times
they
get
into ugly fights and troubles without any reason. To take an example, a word war was on between a politician and a cinema actor about the issues of education in the capital of India where the actor posted a
statement
saying there is no progress in the education industry in New Delhi, whereas, the politician had the actual facts about the progress taking place in that section of the society.
So
setting limits would be a great gesture for all to
stop
portraying biased views.

In conclusion
, democratic independence
gives
us the right to speak,
but
what to speak and to what extent is in the hands of an individual. Using it
wisely
is advised
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay If you had a choice between going to a movie theater to watch a movie or watching that same movie at home on a large television, which would you choose? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
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