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Using the main points and examples from the lecture, describes the two kinds of rock formations in a cavern, and explain how the professor helps his students remember the difference between the two. v.1

Using the main points and examples from the lecture, describes the two kinds of rock formations in a cavern, and explain how the professor helps his students remember the difference between the two. v. 1
Increasing the number of sports facilities is one way to improve public health. However, there are also other measures that needed to comprehend. Firstly, drinking eight glasses of water every day is also a great help to improve our immune system. Our body needs water, so even though we exercise a lot, if we didn't drink enough water, our body will be weak because our tissues, organs and more needs liquid to function normally. Secondly, eating a balanced diet. It's normal for people eat anything their hearts desire. As of improving public health, we need to limit some acidic and high-fatty foods. In this case, we are able to take care of our digestive system, liver and other parts of the organ that will be affected. Thirdly, getting enough sleep every day. A proper sleep of a person is 7-8 hours per cycle. This method will help our brain to function properly. Our body needs rest and as part of improving public health, getting enough sleep every day is a big help. It also boosts our energy and mood in the morning. It will also lead to a productive performance of a person. In conclusion, increasing the number of sports facilities helps us to become fit and to exercise our muscles as well. But, there are also other measures that need to take a hand. These measures will help us to live longer, stay healthy until we get old, and also helps us to become happy for the rest of our lives.
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help
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improve
our immune system. Our body
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needs
water,
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so
even though
we exercise a lot, if we didn't drink
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enough
water, our body will be weak
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because
our tissues, organs and more
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needs
liquid to function
normally
.

Secondly
, eating a balanced diet. It's normal for
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people
eat anything their hearts desire. As of improving public health, we
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need
to limit
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some
acidic and high-fatty foods.
In this case
, we are able to take care of our digestive system, liver and other parts of the organ that will be
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affected
.

Thirdly
, getting
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enough
sleep every day. A proper sleep of a person is 7-8 hours per cycle. This method will
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help
our brain to function
properly
. Our body
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needs
rest and as part of improving public health, getting
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enough
sleep every day is a
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big
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help
. It
also
boosts our energy and mood in the morning. It will
also
lead to a productive performance of a person.

In conclusion
, increasing the number of sports facilities
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helps
us to become fit and to exercise our muscles
as well
.
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But
, there are
also
other measures that
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need
to take a hand. These measures will
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help
us to
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live
longer, stay healthy until we
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old
, and
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Using the main points and examples from the lecture, describes the two kinds of rock formations in a cavern, and explain how the professor helps his students remember the difference between the two. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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