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Using the main points and examples from the lecture, describe the habitable zone, and then explain how the definition has been expanded by modern scientists v.1

Using the main points and examples from the lecture, describe the habitable zone, and then explain how the definition has been expanded by modern scientists v. 1
Gender equality has always been the main concern of the world for ages. Now days most of the people are getting modern in their approach towards this evil of society and learning to respect both the gender. Although, few people are their living in many backward parts of the world who believe just the opposite, they consider one gender superior to another. Talking about the jobs relevant for one particular gender is made for the benefit of society. I am in favour of gender equality, but I also believe there are certain jobs which are not meant for women and will explain the same in later parts. Certain risk related jobs like working in a coal mine or a factory having hazardous processes and other such jobs are risking and dangerous for women to do and also the ones which involves physical strength. Although, there are many other jobs which earlier are not done by women, but now with the change in technology and thinking women are doing and excelling also. For instance, management jobs Moreover, along with that there are many jobs which are not supposed to be done by men and women are good at them. Men and women are complimentary to each other and no one can take others place. In conclusion, I would say that men and women are equal only thing is that they are complimentary to each other and should be given equal place in society so that they can prove their worth in this world for the betterment of society.
Gender equality has always been the main concern of the world for ages.
Now
days most of the
people
are getting modern in their approach towards this evil of
society
and learning to respect both the gender. Although, few
people
are their living in
many
backward parts of the world who believe
just
the opposite, they consider one gender superior to another. Talking about the
jobs
relevant for one particular gender
is made
for the benefit of
society
. I am in
favour
of gender equality,
but
I
also
believe there are certain
jobs
which are not meant for
women
and will
explain
the same in later parts.

Certain
risk
related
jobs
like working in a coal mine or a factory having hazardous processes and
other
such
jobs
are risking and
dangerous
for
women
to do and
also
the ones which involves physical strength. Although, there are
many
other
jobs
which earlier are not done by
women
,
but
now
with the
change
in technology and thinking
women
are doing and excelling
also
.
For instance
, management
jobs


Moreover
, along with that there are
many
jobs
which are not supposed to
be done
by
men
and
women
are
good
at them.
Men
and
women
are complimentary to each
other
and no one can take others place.

In conclusion
, I would say that
men
and
women
are equal
only
thing is that they are complimentary to each
other
and should be
given
equal place in
society
so
that they can prove their worth in this world for the betterment of
society
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Using the main points and examples from the lecture, describe the habitable zone, and then explain how the definition has been expanded by modern scientists v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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