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Essay topics: IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou have a new job and can no longer attend your regular English class. Write a letter to the English school. In your letter: - describe the situation- explain the problem- say what you would like to happe v.1

Essay topics: IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou have a new job and can no longer attend your regular English class. Write a letter to the English school. In your letter: - describe the situation- explain the problem- say what you would like to happe v. 1
First and foremost, raising children right is the most important responsibility of any parent. Children who are raised right not only have a good life, but also contribute positively towards building a better society. Bringing up our offspring well would mean not just taking care of their physical and financial needs, in addition means investing time and energy in adhering to their emotional, mental and intellectual needs. Parenting in my opinion is an equal responsibility of both parents. Being a mother myself, I believe that men too have a similar skill set when it comes to parenting. Though, the traditional view puts the mother on the mantel saying that women are more sensitive and sensible, so they make better parents, in my personal experience, men as well have the same sensibilities when it comes to looking after a child. We are definitely observing this more in the modern society where work allows even dads to take paternity leave due to which they are able to form a stronger bond with their kids from day 1. Like, my husband had taken a paternity leave when my daughter was born, and he took part in all the chores of the newborn from feeding to changing diapers. So, by the end of the 1st month itself, my husband also knew what my baby's cry meant, which traditionally most believe only the mother knows. And, since he formed such a strong bond at an early stage, even today when my child is nearly 3 years old, he knows what she is thinking or feeling, sometimes even better than me. I have observed a similar pattern in most of my friends where fathers spend enough time with the child and saw the contrary, to be true where father had gone back to work immediately. In conclusion, parenting is a wholesome job of the parents and both the mom and dad have similar sensibilities and skills to bring up a child well it is just a matter of letting go of the traditional misgivings and enjoying parenthood to the maximum.
First
and foremost, raising children right is the most
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important
responsibility of any
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parent
. Children who
are raised
right not
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only
have a
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good
life,
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but
also
contribute
positively
towards building a better society. Bringing up our offspring well would mean not
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just
taking care of their physical and financial needs,
in addition
means investing time and energy in adhering to their emotional, mental and intellectual needs.

Parenting in my opinion is an equal responsibility of both
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parents
. Being a mother myself, I believe that
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men
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too have
a similar
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skill
set when it
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comes
to parenting. Though, the traditional view puts the mother on the mantel saying that women are more sensitive and sensible,
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so
they
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make
better
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parents
, in my personal experience,
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men
as well
have the same sensibilities when it
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comes
to looking after a
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child
. We are definitely observing this more in the modern society where work
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allows
even dads to take paternity
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leave
due to which they are able to form a stronger bond with their kids from day 1.

Like, my husband had taken a paternity
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leave
when my daughter
was born
, and he
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took part
in all the chores of the newborn from feeding to changing diapers.
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So
, by the
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end
of the 1st month itself, my husband
also
knew what my baby's cry meant, which
traditionally
most believe
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only
the mother knows. And, since he formed such a strong bond at an early stage, even
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today
when my
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child
is
nearly
3 years
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old
, he knows what she is thinking or feeling,
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sometimes
even better than me. I have observed a similar pattern in most of my friends where fathers spend
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enough
time with the
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child
and
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saw
the contrary, to be true where father had gone back to work immediately.

In conclusion
, parenting is a wholesome job of the
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parents
and both the mom and dad have similar sensibilities and
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skills
to bring up a
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child
well it is
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just
a matter of letting go of the traditional misgivings and enjoying parenthood to the maximum.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Essay topics: IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou have a new job and can no longer attend your regular English class. Write a letter to the English school. In your letter: - describe the situation- explain the problem- say what you would like to happe v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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