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Using the main point and examples from the lecture, describe the benefits of planned forest fires. v.1

Using the main point and examples from the lecture, describe the benefits of planned forest fires. v. 1
It is argued that individuals engaged in various job roles should get to entertain holidays according to the nature of the work. It is agreed that workers who are in a job which is demanding should be provided time off accordingly. This essay will discuss firstly, how some jobs are more tiring than others, and secondly, the fact that certain work profiles allow more vacation time; followed by a reasoned conclusion. It is indisputable that depending on the type of work, some jobs can be extremely exhausting when compared to others. Office or desk jobs, for instance, are definitely less exhausting than professions such as mine workers, construction workers or teachers. Based on my personal experience, teaching students, especially teenagers can be incredibly exhausting than other jobs. Hence, certain jobs deserve more time off than others. Similarly, some jobs which are only performed during certain months/periods of the year allows people to take a longer time off from work. Jobs like forest fire fighting or fruit picking can only be done in summer. This allows them to have a longer duration off from the work. According to a daily newspaper, it is estimated that 20% of the workforce engaged in seasonal jobs get to enjoy more time as holidays when compared to regular jobs. In conclusion, time off from work should be determined based on the type of the work as some can be extensively exhausting and some would give the opportunity to enjoy more free time because of the seasonal labour.
It
is argued
that individuals engaged in various
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job
roles should
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get
to entertain holidays according to the nature of the
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work
. It is
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agreed
that workers who are in a
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job
which is demanding should
be provided
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time
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off
accordingly
. This essay will discuss
firstly
, how
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some
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jobs
are more tiring than others, and
secondly
, the fact that certain
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work
profiles
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allow
more vacation
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time
; followed by a reasoned conclusion.

It is indisputable that depending on the type of
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work
,
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some
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jobs
can be
extremely
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exhausting
when compared to others. Office or desk
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jobs
,
for instance
, are definitely less
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exhausting
than professions such as mine workers, construction workers or teachers. Based on my personal experience, teaching students,
especially
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teenagers
can be
incredibly
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exhausting
than other
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jobs
.
Hence
, certain
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jobs
deserve more
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time
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off
than others.

Similarly
,
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some
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jobs
which are
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only
performed during certain months/periods of the year
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allows
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people
to take a longer
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time
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off
from
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work
.
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Jobs
like forest fire fighting or fruit picking can
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only
be done
in summer. This
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allows
them to have a longer duration
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off
from the
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work
. According to a daily newspaper, it
is estimated
that 20% of the workforce engaged in seasonal
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jobs
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get
to enjoy more
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time
as holidays when compared to regular jobs.

In conclusion
,
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off
from
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work
should
be determined
based on the type of the
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work
as
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some
can be
extensively
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exhausting
and
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some
would give the opportunity to enjoy more free
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time
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because
of the seasonal
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labour
.
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IELTS essay Using the main point and examples from the lecture, describe the benefits of planned forest fires. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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