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q2. Some people watch the news on TV. Other prefer to read the news in a newspaper. Still others use their computers to get the news. How do you prefer to be informed and why. Use reasons and examples. v.1

q2. Some people watch the news on TV. Other prefer to read the news in a newspaper. Still others use their computers to get the news. How do you prefer to be informed and why. Use reasons and examples. v. 1
There is no doubt that traffic and pollution from vehicles have become huge problems, both in cities and on motorways everywhere. Solving these problems is likely to need more than a simple rise in the price of petrol. While it is undeniable that private car use is one of the main causes of the increase in traffic and pollution, higher fuel costs are unlikely to limit the number of drivers for long. As this policy would also affect the cost of public transport, it would be very unpopular with everyone who needs to travel on the roads. But there are various other measures that could be implemented that would have a huge effect on these problems. I think to tackle the problem of pollution, cleaner fuels need to be developed. The technology is already available to produce electric cars that would be both quieter and cleaner to use. Persuading manufacturers and travellers to adopt this new technology would be a more effective strategy for improving air quality, especially in cities. However, traffic congestion will not be solved by changing the type of private vehicle people can use. To do this, we need to improve the choice of public transport services available to travellers. For example, if sufficient sky trains and underground train systems were built and effectively maintained in our major cities, then traffic on the roads would be dramatically reduced. Long—distance train and coach services should be made attractive and affordable alternatives to driving your own car for long journeys. In conclusion, I think that long-term traffic and pollution reductions would depend on educating the public to use public transport more, and on governments using public money to construct and run efficient systems.
There is no doubt that
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traffic
and
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pollution
from vehicles have become huge problems, both in cities and on motorways everywhere. Solving these problems is likely to
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need
more than a simple rise in the price of petrol.

While it is undeniable that private car
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use
is one of the main causes of the increase in
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traffic
and
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pollution
, higher fuel costs are unlikely to limit the number of drivers for long. As this policy would
also
affect the cost of
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public
transport, it would be
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very
unpopular with everyone who
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needs
to travel on the roads.
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But
there are various other measures that could
be implemented
that would have a huge effect on these problems.

I
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think
to tackle the problem of
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pollution
, cleaner fuels
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need
to
be developed
. The technology is already available to produce electric cars that would be both quieter and cleaner to
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use
. Persuading manufacturers and
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travellers
to adopt this new technology would be a more effective strategy for improving air quality,
especially
in cities.

However
,
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traffic
congestion will not
be solved
by changing the type of private vehicle
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people
can
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use
. To do this, we
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need
to
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improve
the choice of
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public
transport services available to
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travellers
.
For example
, if sufficient sky trains and underground train systems
were built
and
effectively
maintained in our major cities, then
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traffic
on the roads would be
dramatically
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reduced
. Long—distance train and coach services should
be made
attractive and affordable alternatives to driving your
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own
car for long journeys.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that long-term
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traffic
and
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pollution
reductions would depend on educating the
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public
to
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use
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public
transport more, and on
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governments
using
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public
money to construct and run efficient systems.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay q2. Some people watch the news on TV. Other prefer to read the news in a newspaper. Still others use their computers to get the news. How do you prefer to be informed and why. Use reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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