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Using the information in the diagram, write a description of how a refrigerator works. You may use your own knowledge or experience in addition to the diagram. v.4

Using the information in the diagram, write a description of how a refrigerator works. You may use your own knowledge or experience in addition to the diagram. v. 4
The provided diagram illustrates the working process of a refrigerator. Initially, a cool high-pressure liquid flows through the capillary tube, then it will be heated up by the evaporator heat from food within the refrigerator to become a warm low-pressure gas. In the next step, this gas continues its way to a compressor which will turn the warm low-pressure gas into a hot high-pressure gas. At this stage, the high temperature still remains and waits for the next step to be released. In the second part of the process, the hot high-pressure gas will go to a condenser. The condenser which consists of a complicated network of tubes will act as an important part of the refrigerator to transfer the heat of the high-pressure gas into the atmosphere. After that, the cool high-pressure liquid will come out at the other side of the condenser and a new circle will be begin. Overall, it is quite simple to imagine the way a standard refrigerator works. Nowadays, with the strong development of science and technology, we may see many types of more complex refrigerators in the daily life.
The provided diagram illustrates the working process of a refrigerator.

Initially
, a cool
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high-pressure
liquid flows through the capillary tube, then it will
be heated
up by the evaporator heat from food within the
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refrigerator
to become a warm low-pressure
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gas
. In the
next
step, this
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gas
continues its way to a compressor which will turn the warm low-pressure
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gas
into a hot
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high-pressure
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gas
. At this stage, the high temperature
still
remains and waits for the
next
step to
be released
.

In the second part of the process, the hot
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high-pressure
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gas
will go to a condenser. The condenser which consists of a complicated network of tubes will act as an
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important
part of the
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refrigerator
to transfer the heat of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high-pressure
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gas
into the atmosphere. After that, the cool
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high-pressure
liquid will
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come
out at the other side of the condenser and a new circle will be
Consider using the past participle "begun"?
begin
.

Overall
, it is quite simple to imagine the way a standard
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
refrigerator
works. Nowadays, with the strong development of science and technology, we may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
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many
types of more complex
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refrigerators
in the daily life.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Using the information in the diagram, write a description of how a refrigerator works. You may use your own knowledge or experience in addition to the diagram. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
186 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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