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do you agree or disagree with the following statement? parents are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. use specific reason and examples to support your ansewr. v.804

parents are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. use specific reason and examples to support your ansewr. v. 804
That education of children plays an important role in both life and future of the the children is an undeniable fact. Should we realize the signeficance of parents in the education situation of children, we will ponder over the educated children in the past and now much more scrupulusly. the effect that parnents have in education of children have been recently the topic debate among experts. I believe that nowadays, parennts much more influenced in the education of children than the past. and these are my justification, To begin with, a lot of parents are educated. because the policy of the goverment decided in 20 years ago, we can see that parents have university degree or at least were gradueted from hischool. for example, when I ask my father weather his parents observed in his education my he say that " my parents did not know I went to school or not" . However, my parents are going to my school regularly and they are talking with my teachers and they know my situation in the school, therefore parents have observence over the education of children. The second reason Why I advocate this point of vie liaising the fact that parents have a lot of concerns about the future of the children. parents want their children to have wealthy life in the futuer and the know that nowadays, creating a good life because econnemy situation is realy hard. for example, last week my aunts talked each other and topic of them was the education of their children, on the other hand, I never heard my grand father speak about the education of children so I can concud the education of childrent is more important in the present than the past. at least but not the least parents have less kids the the past. i makes parent able to creat better situation for childrien. for instance, once I talked my granfather about my father he said a memorise about my dad then my dad said that this memorise was about my ant. not only did he not remmeber the exactly but also he did not know he had how children. therefore, the number of children makes parents can not involve in the education of their. Having discussion this point the from tha point of perspective. I would rather look at it from another view as well, we can not see the parent are invoved the education of children as whole because there were few of parents that they tried to observe the education of children. altuough, these parent exiested, the number of them is much more than the past. so we can ignore them. By taking all above-mentioned argumants into consideration the following conclusion can be drown about the issue. understimating the infuence of parents over the education of children not logical. attending the issue, meticulously, contribute to agreeing witt statment that parents are involved in the education of their children much more than the past.
That
education
of
children
plays an
important
role in both life and future of
the the
children
is an undeniable fact. Should we realize the
signeficance
of
parents
in the
education
situation
of
children
, we will ponder over the educated
children
in the
past
and
now
much
more
scrupulusly
.
the
effect that
parnents
have in
education
of
children
have been recently the topic debate among experts.

I believe that nowadays,
parennts
much
more influenced in the
education
of
children
than the
past
.
and
these are my justification, To
begin
with,
a lot of
parents
are educated
.
because
the policy of the
goverment
decided in 20 years ago, we can
see
that
parents
have university degree or at least were
gradueted
from
hischool
.
for
example, when I ask my father weather his
parents
observed in his
education
my he say that
&quot
; my
parents
did not
know
I went to school or
not&quot
;
.
However
, my
parents
are going to my school
regularly and
they are talking with my
teachers and
they
know
my
situation
in the school,
therefore
parents
have
observence
over the
education
of
children
. The second reason Why I advocate this point of vie liaising the fact that
parents
have
a lot of
concerns about the future of the
children
.
parents
want their
children
to have wealthy life in the
futuer
and the
know
that nowadays, creating a
good
life
because
econnemy
situation
is
realy
hard
.
for
example, last week my aunts talked each other and topic of them was the
education
of their
children
,
on the other hand
, I never heard my grand father speak about the
education
of
children
so
I can
concud
the
education
of
childrent
is more
important
in the present than the
past
.
at
least
but
not the least
parents
have
less
kids
the the
past
.
i
makes
parent
able to
creat
better
situation
for
childrien
.
for
instance, once I talked my
granfather
about my father he said
a memorise
about my dad then my dad said that
this memorise
was about my ant.
not
only
did he not
remmeber
the exactly
but
also
he did not
know
he had how
children
.
therefore
, the number of
children
makes
parents
can not involve in the
education
of their.

Having discussion this point the
from
tha
point of perspective. I would
rather
look at it from another view
as well
, we can not
see
the
parent
are
invoved
the
education
of
children
as whole
because
there were few of
parents
that they tried to observe the
education
of
children
.
altuough
, these
parent
exiested
, the number of them is
much
more than the
past
.
so
we can
ignore
them.

By taking all above-mentioned
argumants
into consideration the following conclusion can be
drown
about the issue.
understimating
the
infuence
of
parents
over the
education
of
children
not logical.
attending
the issue,
meticulously
, contribute to agreeing
witt
statment
that
parents
are involved
in the
education
of their
children
much
more than the
past
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
52Mistakes
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IELTS essay parents are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. use specific reason and examples to support your ansewr. v. 804

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
495 words
5.5
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