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Some people think that all the lawbreakers should be taken into the prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives, (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). v. 1

It is generally thought, in some countries, that death penalty is the best way to convince people not to commit crimes. Others believe that a long life sentence is a better way. In this essay I will discuss this topic, taking into account advantages and disadvantages from both points of view. Regarding the first view, we could say that there isn't nothing worse than death. So with what courage would anyone commit a crime, in a country where capital punishment is legal? On the base of this logical reasoning, in this way infractions could be reduced to almost zero. However, we can see that in most cases this is not true. In fact, despite this belief, studies reveal the opposite. For example, there is capital punishment in some of the USA States, but in these places the crime rate is not less than that of other cities or countries where the death penalty is not allowed. Contrariwise, according to the studies conducted on this topic, a long life sentence seems to be a much better deterrent. From a certain point of view, spend all of our remaining life in prison can be worse than an immediate death. In conclusion, I believe that capital punishment is absolutely not necessary to reduce crime rate, but I think that the most important thing about this topic is that we don't have any right to kill another human being, whatever the crime he has committed. None of us can have a greater right over a person's life.

IELTS essay Some people think that all the lawbreakers should be taken into the prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives, (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

It is
generally
thought
, in
some
countries, that death penalty is the best way to convince
people
not to commit
crimes
. Others believe that a long
life
sentence is a better way. In this essay I will discuss this topic, taking into account advantages and disadvantages from both points of view. Regarding the
first
view, we could say that there isn'
t nothing
worse than death.
So
with what courage would anyone commit a
crime
, in a country where capital punishment is legal? On the base of this logical reasoning, in this way infractions could be
reduced
to almost zero.
However
, we can
see
that
in most cases
this is not true. In fact, despite this belief, studies reveal the opposite.
For example
, there is capital punishment in
some of the
USA States,
but
in these places the
crime
rate is not less than that of other cities or countries where the death penalty is not
allowed
. Contrariwise, according to the studies conducted on this topic, a long
life
sentence seems to be a much better deterrent. From a certain point of view, spend all of our remaining
life
in prison can be worse than an immediate death.
In conclusion
, I believe that capital punishment is
absolutely
not necessary to
reduce
crime
rate,
but
I
think
that the most
important
thing about this topic is that we don't have any right to kill another human being, whatever the
crime
he has committed. None of us can have a greater
right over
a person's
life
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Essay
4 paragraphs
253 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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