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Using points and examples from the talk, describe the uses of gestures and facial expressions in human communication. v.1

Using points and examples from the talk, describe the uses of gestures and facial expressions in human communication. v. 1
As per the statistics, it is observed that the crime rates in the metro cities are higher than that of in small villages. The main reason for this disparity in income and surviving is difficult in towns. There is range of measure that can be implemented to resolve this problem. The main cause of increased crime rates is a disparity in income between rich and poor. As the expenses are higher in cities, the people are forced to work overtime. If they lose their jobs due to some reason, they would quickly start exploring new ways to get money. Moreover, the potential returns on crime is way higher in towns than in rural areas. In Addition, there is a sense of community in small villages. As they know their neighbours, they will always care for them, whereas people in cities tend to be busy in their own world and hardly know the people in their area. There are some potential solutions to bring down the crime rate in urban areas. Firstly, the government should try to reduce the difference in the income, by taxing the rich people and helping the poor. Secondly, there should be community centre in every locality, which helps people to know more about their neighbours. Lastly, the rich businessman or industrialist should try to not remove people from their job. In Conclusion, Although there is disparity in income levels and returns from a crime are higher in cities, government and the businessman should work towards the above solution.
As per the statistics, it
is observed
that the
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crime
rates in the metro
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cities
are higher than that of in
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small
villages. The main reason for this disparity in
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income
and surviving is difficult in towns. There is range of measure that can
be implemented
to resolve this problem.

The main cause of increased
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crime
rates is a disparity in
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income
between rich and poor. As the expenses are higher in
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cities
, the
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people
are forced
to work overtime. If they lose their jobs due to
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some
reason, they would
quickly
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start
exploring new ways to
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get
money.
Moreover
, the potential returns on
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crime
is way higher in towns than in rural areas.
In Addition
, there is a sense of community in
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small
villages. As they know their
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neighbours
, they will always care for them, whereas
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people
in
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cities
tend to be busy in their
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own
world and hardly know the
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people
in their area.

There are
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some
potential solutions to bring down the
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crime
rate in urban areas.
Firstly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the difference in the
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income
, by taxing the rich
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people
and helping the poor.
Secondly
, there should be community
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centre
in every locality, which
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helps
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people
to know more about their
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neighbours
.
Lastly
, the rich businessman or industrialist should try to not remove
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people
from their job.

In Conclusion
, Although there is disparity in
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income
levels and returns from a
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crime
are higher in
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cities
,
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government
and the businessman should work towards the above solution.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Using points and examples from the talk, describe the uses of gestures and facial expressions in human communication. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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